Date: December 22, 2021 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 13
This one was fun. Feels like in the future they'll look back on mini-golfing as their first un-offical date. Or they'll constantly argue (good naturedly of course) about this or some other date that was their "first" date.
I love that Jim is messing with the scorecard. He's a prankster for sure, and that is the low level kind of thing that is more endearing rather than irritating. Really a lot of fun. Especially when he sees what Pam did to his jello back in the office. She's got a wonderful wit to her that makes their banter come alive. Just a ton of fun with this one.
Also caught the meta reference to "Love Actually" there. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thanks! I really enjoyed writing this one. And glad you got the reference!
Date: December 22, 2021 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 13
Another satisfying chapter, loving the gentle building of the romance. Looking forward to the next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review!
Date: December 22, 2021 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 13
Another satisfying chapter, loving the gentle building of the romance. Looking forward to the next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: December 22, 2021 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 13
Another satisfying chapter, loving the gentle building of the romance. Looking forward to the next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
1 [Report This]Date: December 21, 2021 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 12
Oh man, I rewatched Love Actually the other day and I think Jack and Judy are actually my favourite couple in it, their scenes are so sweet and funny - so I love, love, love this idea! Especially with the Martin Freeman connection! Genius.
Michael filming a porno with Jan, with Dwight as his assistant, a creepy Creed and a Kevin who can’t stop giggling - plus all the use of the actual Office filming crew etc - is just so brilliant here. I’ve basically devoured all twelve chapters, oops, but I love the way you’ve woven in moments from the show (having them act out actual Jam scenes that turn into badly-written Michal porn is both fantastic and hilarious), and I really adore the mix of awkwardness and hotness that you’ve written between them in these scenes, and how sweet Jim is.
And then a Pam who wakes up to Roy and gets herself out of that relationship - yes please! I particularly enjoyed her realisations over the past couple of chapters about all the small ways she’s held herself back/been stuck in a rut, and the way you’ve written her progressing past those is so great to see.
I’m loving all of this - can’t wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Thank you SO SO much for your review! Glad you like the idea so much! I can see so many similarities between Jack and Judy and Jim and Pam, so I’m glad you’re enjoying it!
I’m really happy all the canon elements are coming across so well too!
There will be more to come don’t worry!
Thanks again for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: December 21, 2021 03:36 pm Title: Chapter 12
Really feels like Pam's starting to come out of her shell here. A a more adult grooming routine and outfit. Something she wouldn't have thought of in her previous relationship. I doesn't feel like she's doing any of this for Jim either. She's doing it for herself. Nice to see that kind of progression.
Something tells me Pam and Jim should take the time to go back and read over that contract. There will probably less surprises if they do that. That being said Jim's attempts to remain discreet are adorable even if he's at war with himself a bit there.
Looking forward to mini-golf and for Jim to find the surprise she left in the Jello. Great way to take something from canon and give it your own twist for sure.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I thought it was important all of Pam’s changes were for herself only, she needs a little independence for herself. I’m glad you liked the jello twist, thought it might be fun for Jim to be on the end of his own prank for once!
1 [Report This]Date: December 21, 2021 01:44 pm Title: Chapter 12
Still get excited every time you upload!
Author's Response: Oh you
Date: December 19, 2021 11:37 am Title: Chapter 11
"So that's it huh? I never even got a say? You're just done? What about what I want?" - This response to hearing about the ring is *peak* Roy. He is just wonderfully obnoxious about in his total lack of comprehension of what's going on and his demands on Pam. Couldn't have done more here to reassure Pam she made the right decision.
So we've got a footloose and fancy-free Pam, a teapot-armed Jim... I wonder what happens next? ;) Can't wait to see it!
Author's Response: You’ll have to wait and see! Hopefully the next chapter won’t be too far away but I’ve hurt my neck and finding it very hard to write, so there might be a short delay!
Author's Response: You’ll have to wait and see! Hopefully the next chapter won’t be too far away but I’ve hurt my neck and finding it very hard to write, so there might be a short delay!
Date: December 19, 2021 09:48 am Title: Chapter 11
That was about what I figured it would be with Roy. Completly clueless about just about everything. Pam's right, he's still stuck in high school and thinks Pam is there to just wait on him hand and foot. He even admitted he expected to have his dinner made for him. It really comes across that Roy thinks the words, "I love you," are like a set of magic words that will bascially unlock Pam's pants and at the same time cause her to fawn all over him while he gets to do nothing. Well there's a lot more to love than that. He has constantly shown that he may say the words, but there's no actions or intent behind those words. He doesn't respect her, care for her, or really love her. He loves himself and the fact that until now she's done just about everything for him. I forsee that Roy's going to have a much rougher time post-break up than Pam, but that's on him. His emotional needs are no longer Pam's concerns. He needs to grow up for himself.
Well done on Pam for staying strong. Yeah it's hard to break from something like this, but she is. However all those things she wants in a relationship? They're ready and waiting for her when she's ready to open her heart again. Something tells me that probably won't take very long.
Nice job in giving us the full conversation between Pam and Roy too. I've read a lot of fics that kind of gloss over it. You didn't. You explored it which can be a challenge. But it rang true to me. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! I definitely thought it was important to get the whole break up, so I’m glad it all came across ok! And now Roy is gone 🎉
Date: December 18, 2021 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 10
Well there's a Fancy New Beesly in action! Love that she's made the decision and is just taking charge, doing what it takes to follow through and trying to think critically about the life she really wants.
Also think this is an important note here about her and Roy's relationship - it's not so much that it's always been miserable so much as they just stopped growing together relatively early on.
LOVE the note about Jim's father fleeing two states away. Ha. Like father like son!
TEAPOT SIGHTING.
Author's Response: So glad you liked the bit about his dad! And definitely wanted to show there was a reason to be with Roy, just there isn’t one now. Thank you as always for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: December 18, 2021 11:39 am Title: Chapter 10
I love this time we got to spend with Pam here, sort of a slowing down and getting to see what's going through her head. Her shopping trip felt very therapeutic to me, and her new life without Roy seems so close! Loved this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so so much!
Date: December 17, 2021 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 10
Way to go Pam! That's the Fancy New Beesly we are all hoping to see. Though I sense a lot of awkwardness coming if she still has to share the apartment with Roy even if she's basically a roommate now rather than fiancé. Hopefully she can get her own place fairly soon. But still she's doing all sort of things for her and it's great to see. You can just feel the confidence building in her. Hopefully that will last into Sunday when Roy gets home.
Aww Jim, look at you buying her the teapot. He's so head over heels for her and it's adorable.
Really looking forward to the next chapter of this one.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It’s all written so I promise it won’t be too long until it’s up. That’s what she said
Date: December 14, 2021 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 9
Roy's big tactical error becoming clear. Without his constant badgering she has time to think. And Pam reflecting on their relationship is NOT going to do anything for its longevity.
I kinda like that the studio has an appropriate skeezy version of the roof to go along with its somewhat skeezy purpose. Kind of a nice metaphor for their relationship - instead of starting in an ordinary place, it's starting in a place you wouldn't expect them to find love. Very cute.
Author's Response: Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2021 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 9
So what I really like about this one is that it's more of Jim and Pam building their relationship outside of anything physical. I'm sure there will be more of that as we go forward, but it's not the basis of their relationship. The fact they can talk about things and are building trust is a much better basis. Still doing a great job working in things from canon and giving them new twists as well. The fight between Jan and Michael was a nice touch in that regard. Looking forward to more as always. Also really great job on getting updates out quickly.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! Feeling the pressure now to get the next chapter out 😬 it’s a big one so might take a while! That’s what she said
Date: December 13, 2021 04:08 pm Title: Chapter 8
Dear Lorde this Roy is an asshole. Pam might be doing him a favor by drop-kicking him here, because he's clearly got an immense amount of growing up to do and he's clearly not going to unless he has zero other choice.
Of course Kelly is a big believer in the life-changing power of makeovers. And really, more power to her.
"but the sets I have been on are super slick and everyone just works super long and hard to get it all done." Oh, Jim. You set her up for that.
" There had been one time at her first art show in high school where he'd come along and called her art ‘the prettiest art of all the art'. That was the night she'd lost her virginity to him. He'd never come to another art show after that." Ugh. Roy. Why did you not dump this guy nine years ago???
You've continued to do a really good job making comic use of canon details here!
Author's Response:
I think I may have over orver projected my hatred of Roy here 🤣🤣
And thank you! There’s a lot going into these canon callbacks with rewatching and looking at scripts to get them spot on, so glad you’re enjoying them!
Date: December 13, 2021 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 8
This is really entertaining, you’re building the tension really nicely. Roy’s an idiot!
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, yes he is.
Date: December 13, 2021 09:52 am Title: Chapter 8
Something tells me that Roy is going to come home on Sunday with all of Pam's stuff gone and her ring on the table. I mean, seriously, if that's not the biggest red flag of them all than I don't know what is. Good for her that she sees it too. It sucks, but it feels like she's done with that relationship.
Lots of fun with all the canon callbacks as always. You're really doing a great job working those in.
It's also kind of an agonizing slow burn with Jim and Pam. Yes they have to be physical with each other as part of this job. However they both clearly want more than what they're doing as stand-ins. Though I would posit they'd prefer to explore such things without the film crew there. Nice work.
Author's Response:
Ah thank you! I’m trying to make them not seem just shoved in, so hopefully they feel kinda natural. I’m having a lot of fun with them and seeing how things work in different environments!
And Roy definitely needs to go doesn’t he! We know how long it took for our kids to get together, I can’t be rushing them now here can I! 😜
1 [Report This]Date: December 12, 2021 03:59 am Title: Chapter 1
I love the blossoming friendship/relationship. Also, yes feminist Pam! I look forward to reading these chapters :)
- from your number one fan
Author's Response:
Hahahaha!!! The crown is yours
1 [Report This]Date: December 11, 2021 10:54 pm Title: Chapter 7
Really like the way Jim and Pam's relationship is progressing. All the canon callbacks are a ton of fun. Jim noticing the yogurt, Pam making him a medal, the Boggle timer, Office Olympics games, all great stuff.
It may feel like the friendzone Jim, but I've got a feeling that by being there to listen to her you're laying the groundwork for something much better.
Looks like Roy is still stuck digging his own grave here. The job he practically forced her to get he's all bent out of shape about. Yeah, Pam is changing, for the better and he has not clue how to react. Probably because he's such a selfish man-child who wants Pam to just be a maid, servant, etc. And Pam's not having any of it. She's seen what it's like to be appreciated and I think she's getting clearer vision on what exactly she wants.
Always looking forward to an update with this story. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Ah thank you so much! It's so amazing to hear people are looking forward to new chapters, it's keeping me going at speed with this! Thank you for the review!
Date: December 11, 2021 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 7
Haha I love this backstory for the Boggle timer. I’m now trying to think of ways Creed uses it.
I’m excited to see things progressing on the Pam/Roy breakup front. Don’t leave me hanging!
Author's Response: 😬😬😬
1 [Report This]Date: December 11, 2021 09:57 pm Title: Chapter 6
I love how you’ve established this sort of canon Jim/Pam relationship where Jim is a friend for Pam even though it kills him. You’ve convinced me that their relationship can grow in any setting lol.
Author's Response: Thank you!! I thought it was super important that they become friends first, and then we can see what hijinx this crazy world lands them in!
1 [Report This]Date: December 11, 2021 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 7
dude you have me SO HOOKED. every single night i look to see if you updated and now this absolute CLIFF HANGER in CHAPTER 7?!?!? YES.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This has literally made my day! I'm trying to get the chapters done as quickly as possible, but this one gave me a little trouble. Chapter 8 is almost done though, don't worry!
Date: December 11, 2021 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 7
HA. So much canon being worked in here. And this is a fun use of Creed. This seems like the level of blatant thievery we can expect from him.
Ah, Jim. Seems like your time in the friend zone is going to be pretty brief.
This dialogue is hilariously awful. Very appropriate.
Hmmmm. Roy being home so early feels like a red flag. He is exactly the kind of guy who would get fired, pretend he wasn't and still insist it was his fiancée's job to care for him after being at work all day.
Author's Response:
I'm trying my best to get as much canon in as possible without it being shoved in, so hopefully its coming across as being used appropriately!! I was trying to work in eating a pony sandwich while Pam had her head in the fridge, but just couldn't do it!!
Date: December 09, 2021 10:26 am Title: Chapter 6
Again - SO hilarious how well this canon dialogue fits on a porn set. Michael missed his calling, really.
"Hunter and I were rehearsing all afternoon." ::Pam voice:: Oh, Michael. Lord is Jan ever terrible. And porn director Michael is somehow less creepy than canon Michael, he doesn't deserve that.
Imagine how much more concerned Betsy would be if she knew what Jim was doing for a living... and how badly he was actually falling for Pam!
Author's Response: I shall endeavour to make Michael more creepy 🤣🤣
1 [Report This]Date: December 09, 2021 10:19 am Title: Chapter 5
Ah, love to see Pam with a little fight in her... and with that fight in her because she knows for certain that SHE IS RIGHT. Good for her. And the contrast between Roy demanding his breakfast and Jim making her tea without a second thought is stark.
Oh, Kevin. So close to his dream job, and yet so far. Striking how the casual sexual harassment of The Office translates somehow slightly *more* appropriate in this environment.
This dialogue fits SO PERFECTLY. I'll never watch that deleted scene the same way again.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review :) I was so grateful for that deleted scene!