Date: December 09, 2021 09:14 am Title: Chapter 6
I think you did a good job earlier in this fic setting up a genuine friendship between Jim and Pam. Otherwise it could be seen that the reason Pam is so taken with Jim is simply because it's a new thing being in a position like that with someone who isn't Roy. However with the setup that Pam and Roy were already on the rocks before this all started and the friendship Jim and Pam have started to forge, it comes across that Pam's reactions to Jim are more real. I really like that. Especially since they're getting into more of the physical parts of this job.
Also really like that Jim is making sure Pam is comfortable with what he's doing rather than just reaching in. Shows he's a quality guy. However now he also knows that things aren't picture perfect with Pam's relationship. Not that he's going to try and actively break them up, at least I hope not. But it seems like that would give this Jim a bit more hope than what we saw in canon. Nice heart to heart he had with Betsy too.
Author's Response:
I thought it was important for Pam in this story that she find her own voice and not rely on Jim, so I’m glad that’s coming through!
Author's Response:
I thought it was important for Pam in this story that she find her own voice and not rely on Jim, so I’m glad that’s coming through!
1 [Report This]Date: December 08, 2021 09:50 am Title: Chapter 5
Haha I can so imagine the set being like this. Kevin is just fantastically terrible. I love how it all brings Jim and Pam closer together--the real office is a lot like that too.
Author's Response: Yeah they always do seem like the only sane ones right?!
Date: December 08, 2021 12:05 am Title: Chapter 5
Love that Pam continues to stand up to Roy. She's clearly seeing that he's a jerk and is not just sitting back and taking it anymore. I either see Roy getting increasingly angry at her for this, which will drive her away. Or he becomes some kind of pathetic man-child because he doesn't know how to take care of himself, which also drives Pam away.
Lots of fun with all the references to canon. The deleted scene, the hot sauce hot dogs, Pam in her classic wardrobe. Good stuff. More sparks flying between Jim and Pam too. He's noticing her and it seems like she's reveling in the fact a guy is paying attention to her like that. And of course even more sparks when they are on set. Great way to progress things with this one.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: December 07, 2021 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 5
Good chapter, nice progression.
One thing you haven’t casted in this production yet is who the fluffer is! 🤣
Author's Response: Hahaha!!!🤣🤣
1 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2021 02:52 am Title: Chapter 4
You did a great job on bringing in the rest of the cast as well as some of the crew! I also liked that you've started to sow the seeds of doubt in Pam's mind in a realistic way, I think getting Kelly's input will be hilarious, so looking forward to that!
My only question is how the Angela we know and erm, love, is going to be able to justify being there despite her prudish tendencies!
Author's Response: Ah thank you so much :)
Date: December 06, 2021 02:49 am Title: Chapter 3
I liked this chapter, you started to get the characters introduced to each other and did it well. I also like the way you've incorporated lots of good Office and JAM elements into this. Nice work!
Author's Response: Thanks very much :) lots more of that to come hopefully!
1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2021 09:54 pm Title: Chapter 4
Omg your end note 😂 I died. I hate Roy here but I don’t mind hating on him, especially if it leads Pam away from this relationship and into a better one. I’m excited to see a dressed up Pam and Jim reacting to it. Don’t leave me hanging too long here!
Author's Response:
'Dressed up'? I'm not sure you understand where this story is going :D
I promise I'm back and focused on this now! It won't be too long!
1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2021 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 4
Yikes. Wildly terrible Roy here. Just awful. Glad to see Pam seeing it too and reacting accordingly. Maybe Jim is coming into her life at the perfect time...
Author's Response: It's such a coincidence isn't it :D
1 [Report This]Date: December 05, 2021 03:00 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this concept so much! You’ve written all the characters so well, I always get excited when I see a new update from you!
Author's Response: Thank you so so much! You’ve literally made my day!
Date: December 04, 2021 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 4
Roy actually called her that, in earshot? Yeah, get out of there Pam. To say nothing of the fact he's also trying to control the money she brings in for his own selfish reasons. That's a dark road if she stays down it for much longer. Really glad she's already thinking of leaving him. Get out, get out now Pam, for you regardless of anyone else.
Otherwise lots of fun seeing everyone else, except for Brian trying to make eyes at Pam. However it seems like she's barely registered him. Kind of fun seeing the canon cast with the names of the real world crew. That could be a lot of fun. Same with Jim still trying to ask Pam out. Hopefully it won't be to much longer. Good job.
Author's Response: She’s on her journey don’t worry :)
1 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2021 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
So that's just straight up adorable how they react to each other. Both of them tripping over their own words since they're so taken with the other one. Lots of fun to see that play out.
Loved that Pam's butterflies kick in and stick around now that she's actually being treated like she deserves. Hopefully that feeling grows a bit more and gives her some thought about her current choices in life.
Always fun getting a new version of the lunch at Cugino's. You can feel Jim's disappointment when she tells him she's engaged. Then to add in the 27 seconds? Nice way to bring in more canon elements. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Ah thank you!
I was pretty nervous writing the first ‘date’!
1 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2021 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 3
"Watch it, jackass" - this has to be very similar to the first interaction between Jim and Roy in canon, too.
This Jim and Pam first meeting is just delightfully awkward. They're so smitten and so unable to handle it. I guess there's no such thing as a smooth meet-cute when you're on your way to a porn studio.
"Oh sorry, my mistake, I thought you looked like such a cute couple." Oh, Phyllis. You know full well they're not a couple, you devious little drama llama.
Hmm. Feels like them not reading the contract might come back to haunt them. Big oversight when you're signing up to work on a porn set, kids.
This version of the date makes my heart hurt. And this also feels like a good take on Pam's level of awareness of what's going on - she doesn't want to HIDE Roy, she just doesn't want to THINK about him.
The Stephen and Lori Saux shout-out is a great little Easter egg.
Author's Response: Drama llama, LOVE IT!
1 [Report This]Date: December 03, 2021 11:52 am Title: Chapter 2
First, love that you worked JK's story of being a struggling actor in here... and Jim accidentally insulting the producer feels like very canon-level cringe. This also feels a lot like canon Jim - a guy who is drifting, not sure what he wants to do, yet to find his true North. Add a sense of sexual adventure, and you can see that guy ending up here.
Erin as the receptionist for a porn studio is amazing. (And Phyllis going back to her casting associate roots!) As is Jim trying to do this while living with his parents. A lot of good groundwork here.
Author's Response:
Hahah thank you!
Date: December 03, 2021 01:48 am Title: Chapter 2
Yep, got the JKras "How I almost quit acting" Easter eggs.
I enjoyed some of this chapter, you've set up the next chapters well. Not so keen on the graphic stuff with Katy, I only want to read about him doing anything sexy with Pam!
Author's Response: I know! I really didn't want to write about that (or like writing it), but I needed to show that Jim would kinda be open to the world of porn if he was in a sex relationship like that. I promise there will be only be Jam sexiness from now on!
Date: December 02, 2021 10:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow, Jim and Katy certainly had a lot going on. 😂 I feel sorry for Jim who can’t get his foot in the door with acting, but I’m also looking forward to his and Pam’s on set meeting! You’ve set up an intriguing premise with these first two chapters, and I’m excited to get to the JAM part!
Author's Response: Me tooooo!! It's coming don't worry!
Date: December 02, 2021 06:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ok so Jim putting his foot in his mouth about an American version of a UK show was good fun. Same with some other aspects of early Office lore, like Phyllis being a casting associate. That was fun.
Interesting look at how Jim spent his time in New York. Trying to start an acting career. Various relationship woes. No wonder he's feeling a bit lost.
But the pieces are now in motion. Should be interesting to see what happens when everyone shows up at the filming studio.
Author's Response: It indeed will be interesting :p
1 [Report This]Date: December 02, 2021 09:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This is a really interesting premise. You've really painted Roy as a complete jerk here. Not really caring about anything in regards to Pam. Always brushing her off. Shoving this job in her face but it really seems for his own selfish reasons. Kinda hope that inkling of an idea in Pam's mind really does lead to some great things.
Other than that, welcome to writing at MTT! Always great to have another writers. It can be intimidating writing that first story, but you're really doing great so far. Keep it up! This one looks real interesting.
Author's Response: Thanks so much :) and yes, Roy is a total jerk, I’m really projecting my disklike of him here hahah!
1 [Report This]Date: December 02, 2021 07:11 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm super excited to see how this unfolds. the UST potential here is INSANE.
I love your super-douchey Roy and Pam's actual awareness of how terrible he's being.
Welcome to MTT!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yeah there’s gonna be a lot of tension haha!
Date: December 02, 2021 03:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Welcome and congrats on your first story.
You are diving right in with this one.
I wasn't expecting Roy but if there would be anyone to push Pam onto a porn set. Roy here is well ...what is the opposite of a mensch...he's the small bulge forming in his pants.
I do also wonder what she is getting herself into and how Jim gets involved too.
Author's Response:
Hahaha! I love that description of Roy! And don’t worry, Jim is up next, so all will be revealed!
1 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2021 10:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Here for this! I loved the little hints at canon, especially the opening line LOL. And as small as it is, I also really like that Pam has a job that she likes, even if her fiancé thinks she needs to work on a porn set for more money! Excited to see what you have in store for this!
Author's Response: Thank you for everything! You’re making this so much better already, even if you won’t let me get to the smut yet!!
Date: December 01, 2021 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, intriguing! And I hate Roy already, at his season 1/2 worst. You’ve set this up nicely, looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you :) hope the rest doesn’t disappoint!
1 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2021 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
"it's not many little girls' dream to be a porn star." LOL. Amazing reworking of canon to open here.
Okay, this is a spectacularly awful Roy here. Not closing the bathroom door is bad enough, and the fact that Pam thinks his expressing *regret* for forgetting the food she wants is a sign he cares is so telling... but his slurs against The Princess Bride will not be forgotten or forgiven. You did really well establishing him as a boor here. And I also kinda love that this is something Roy got in his head and couldn't let go, which seems very Roy, and ultimately Pam ends up doing it because Roy just badgers her into it. Seems like a reason Pam ultimately made a lot of decisions.
Congrats on your first fic here! Welcome to the ranks of MTT writers. We're happy to have you! Looking forward to seeing where this goes...
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Very happy to be here!