1 [Report This]Date: December 25, 2022 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
You never have to be sorry for a smutty fic of such quality.
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!!
1 [Report This]Date: December 25, 2022 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
You never have to be sorry for a smutty fic of such quality.
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!!
1 [Report This]Date: December 09, 2021 10:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, controversial opinion time: I actually think Pam and Roy's sex life was one of the places they were most compatible. BUT certainly Pam would deserve this after a long, unsatisfying early adult life. And I think they probably had quite a few wild months at the beginning of their relationship, and good for them. Nice job with this one!
Author's Response:
I’m rewatching again and I really agree with your observation of Pam and Roy’s compatibility and I HATE it haha!! That line about getting you in the tub 🤢And yeah I think Jim and Pam were definitely a bit wild in the beginning – with that unrecorded deleted scene about them filming themselves! But anyways, thank you for the review!!
1 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2021 01:12 am Title: Chapter 1
Ermmm wtf. This was so fun! Love your writing, you have to have more faith in yourself!!!
Author's Response: Haha thanks! I’ll try a little more!
1 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2021 05:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well that was a journey to say the least. Great descriptions of everything they were getting up to. However the best part of it was that it's just Jim and Pam enjoying being with each other. They're confident in their relationship and because of that get to enjoy all the many perks of not having to hide behind anything anymore. Wonderful to read and visualize.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Date: December 06, 2021 01:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Hmmmmm. So this is tricky because on the one hand, this is, in a general sense, clearly well written and you have a couple of great betas there. It's also the thing with reviews that one wants to leave something positive and constructive, so I hope you take it in the spirit in which my words are meant (also I think possibly the longest review to date I've ever left on anything.)
I've just been trying to work out why this piece was a little "off" for me. It's not that it's smut, no issue with that in itself (check my profile, I have plenty of MA stories favourited!) I think, for me anyway (and others may have a very different view) that it's maybe a bit out of character? Or more not quite "our" Jim and Pam? I feel like it could be any horny couple we're reading about. Some of the best smut on here is pretty graphic, but it retains the emotions and romance between the two characters and we always know it's still *them*; and that's what makes it so good. Even though they may be doing some pretty filthy things to each other, as a reader/shipper you can still feel the characterisations at the core of the action.
I liked the point in the first part where you described Pam's change in her sexual awareness and there was a good call-back to her time with Roy and the difference it made being with Jim.
In re-reading this several times, I think it's that the language is quite brutal for two people so early in their relationship, especially as we know these are two romantics (especially Jim, but I would say both of them.) The tone you set from the first paragraph is SEX! SEX! SEX! It's in the reader's face so soon.
To reiterate, where the great FanFic smut and PwoP fics work so well is that they retain that essence of the characters we love. For myself, I love reading about Pam and Jim being in love, that what I want from my smut as well - for me it's not about titillation, it's about getting what we'd get if The Office had been on HBO ;) so even when they may be screwing each other senseless, I can still tell it's *them* doing it and not any other couple.
I hope this helps. You write well and I'm enjoying your other story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review, I definitely appreciate the feedback whatever it is!I guess I wasn't going so much for hyper realistic canon here, more of just a smutty little idea that entered my head. I mean we all know Jim hates dressing up, so I'm not sure I could really see him as Santa :p
Personally I really like some of the stories on here that push their characters slightly more in terms of the relationship or their sexual escapades in a way that they probably wouldn't in canon - I think Snaps or A Beautiful Day in the Neighbourhood are good examples of what I'm trying to get at. But everyone has their own tastes and it doesn't mean anyone is wrong.
But again, thank you for the feedback, it all helps with growing as a writer! And this is still only my second story (I guess first completed one), so I still do have a lot to learn about fan fic!