1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2022 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 5
Awwww. Very cute chapter. And I'm glad you mixed in the banter and the awkwardness *and* the heat here all at once.
1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2022 10:43 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oooooof. I was afraid of that.
I think you did well showing Michael at his best and worst here, and how those moments can basically come right on top of each other. And you can also see how much Pam benefits from having the female friends she *clearly did not have in canon* (angry grumbling) at this juncture. Nice to see her being proactive at this juncture of the story...
1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2022 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 3
Heh heh. I love Isabel instantly being attracted to Dwight here. And I'm pleased Pam's getting prepared to make a move here, if a little nervous that TIME IS PASSING, PAM. Come on, lady.
1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2022 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
"When he’s asleep he looks a lot like the younger version of himself that she fell in love with." So much of this relationship is about nostalgia at this point, and I think you captured that pretty well. Also enjoyed her leaving him with milk and cereal, which may be about as much as he can handle.
I always enjoy a good Isabel presence in a story, and I love her as an agent of chaos here. (Seriously, though, Pam. You should, uh. Probably call Jim.)
1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2022 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Couple of details here I really liked - Pam having adopted fabric softener post-Michael's birthday and how it ends up bringing Jim even deeper into her life, Pam signing her notes XO so she doens't have to say "I love you," and this line: "They had moved twice more and each time there was more of Roy and less of Pam. It had been so gradual she had hardly noticed." That feels like it says so much about their relationship and how it's evolved in a way that just doesn't work for Pam anymore.