1 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2022 06:38 pm Title: The Pitch
Oh I am enjoying this!! Everyone's personality and dialogue is right on the money. Stories where Kelly, Angela, and Pam are a team or friends & are among my favorites. The dynamic between the three is a blast.
So many good things here. Love the Karen shutdown! Jim & Pam hitting it off, the banter, and the bet are all gold. It is also nice that Pam & Jim are on equal footing, running successful businesses.
Excited for chapter 3!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!! I’m so happy you’re enjoying this!
Chapter 3 shouldn’t be too far away
Thanks so much for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2022 01:24 pm Title: The Pitch
The Kelly dialogue remains terrific, and this is exactly how well I'd picture Kelly and Angela as close co-workers going. The Jim-Kevin friendship is fun, too. Poor Kevin. Maybe if this deal goes well he can get plugs.
LANCH CAMPAIGN.
Please tell me Karen goes around introducing herself to everyone as "Karen Filippelli, Filippelli Communications."
This Creed is delightfully bizarre. Poor Jordan.
"Josh Porter, Leverage Inc." Uh oh. Is Creed about to get conned?
Hmmmm. Can't help but feel as though there's a catch in the bet Pam and Jim made at the end here...
Author's Response:
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2022 05:13 pm Title: The Pitch
Sorry Jim, not everyone likes the classic sports. Though I have a funny feeling he made that bet knowing that. Sneaky bugger. Loved it!
Also loved that Jim and Pam start to hit it off right away. Already starting to flirt with each other even in the confines of their profession. That was fun. Jim giving Karen the cold shoulder was nice to see too. Seriously lady take a hint! He's not interested. Feels like there might be a couple landmines there.
Other than that, working in the "it's a date," line when they're already so taken with each other? Tons of fun. I've got a feeling Kelly is going to give Pam an earful about that. So is Angela. CEO Pam seems to be able to handle both of them though. Should be fun seeing how that all pans out. Nice job.
Author's Response:
I think he may indeed have realised this wasn't the best pitch he's ever done!
Yeah Karen really needs to take a hint - something she should definitely have done in season 3 as well!!
Glad you're enjoying this, and as ever, thank you so much for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2022 03:04 pm Title: The Pitch
I like that there is already a connection between
JAM on their first meeting. Karen is just sad.
She can’t see that Jim is completely indifferent to her. I’m surprised that Karen didn’t try to pee a circle around Jim to mark him as her territory.
I definitely got Creed down right, and even Kevin.
Will there by chance be a collaboration between
Jim and Pam’s companies to win Creed’s account?
🤔 I like how you updated quickly, so please do it again.
Author's Response:
I love how much you hate Karen, I feel EXACTLY the same. Unfortunately this might not be the last we've seen of her
I'm hoping to get a chapter a week out, so hopefully the story should move quite quickly. I just have to hope real life doesn't get in the way too much!!
Thanks so much for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2022 09:30 am Title: The Pitch
You write all of the ensemble characters so well! I LOL'd at the mention of Kevin's wig. Nice touch. And then of course this gem:
*Got any ideas that involve music? Or marijuana? Or mung beans? I'm a big fan of the M's.*
Hilarious.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!! I do love writing the other characters, particularly Kelly so I'm glad it's coming across well
Thanks so much for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2022 08:55 am Title: The Brief
Finally starting this one, every time I saw the title I immediately thought of JK with the beard so... nice. Nothing wrong with that at all. ;)
I really like the setup so far. It's cool to see which Dunder Mifflinites you have working with each company, and every time one pops up it's exciting! (...BUT WHERE IS MICHAEL?!)
Very cute how they are both drawn to the photos of each other. Nice to show a clear attraction on both ends from the start.. and both are seemingly unattached? Curious how this one is going to go!
Great start!
Author's Response:
Absolutely nothing wrong indeed ;)
Glad you're liking the ensemble appear. Don't worry about Michael, he's not been forgotten!!
Glad you've enjoyed it so far. Thanks so much for your review!!
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2022 07:58 am Title: The Pitch
Lol this was freaking cute! Angela and Kelly’s argument is absolutely hilarious, and very fitting for them.
Kevin’s TOUPEE oh no! Thank god he left his Kleenex shoes at home this time.
You wrote Creed EXTREMELY well 😂
OMG THIS WAS A MEET-CUTE 🥰 Aw I love how he basically admitted to social media stalking Pam, it was cute!
I figured Karen would be involved somehow too 🥴
THAT BET. OH MY GOD. I LOVE IT!!
This was too cute, mrsk!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review, it's made me smile a lot! Glad you liked this one, and hopefully you'll like what's to come!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2022 11:43 pm Title: The Brief
Yes yes yes I love it already. Can’t wait to see how everything unfolds.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much :)
I hope what comes next doesn't disappoint!
Thank you so much for your review
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2022 02:01 pm Title: The Brief
I love your work. This is starting out to very interesting, so keep going. I like that Pam and Jim have great careers and are instantly attracted to one another without the Roy and Karen problems.
Author's Response:
Thank you SO much!!
Yes, no need to worry about Roy or Karen holding them back here!
Thanks so much for your review, very greatly appreciated!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2022 11:09 am Title: The Brief
Angela shutting down Kelly going in for the high-five is amazing. In general I love the Kelly voice here. I can clearly hear Mindy delivering these lines.
" ‘no Kelly, we've only been dating each other for like four months and it's too soon to have a baby and we're still seeing other people and I don't like committing to things'." Kelly, you're horrible but I enjoy you anyways. And for the record, I think her overtly sexual advertising approach would have both gotten attention and been right up Creed's alley.
Eeep! Fun set-up with them going up against each other. Classic rom-com scenario in the making. Looking forward to seeing what you do with it.
Author's Response:
Ah thanks! I love writing for Kelly, I can hear her in my head and she just flows out hahah!!
Hopefully you won't have to wait too long to see where this goes! A bout of tonsilitis and a swollen finger are slowing things down slightly though!!
Thanks as always for your review!!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2022 08:59 am Title: The Brief
This is such a unique premise for Jim and Pam! You really did a good job with in-charge Pam, knowing what she's doing but still hesitant to give herself the title she deserves.
Gotta say though, I think my favorite part was Kelly being pregnant and her feelings about it. I definitely laughed out loud at her explanation of how the pregnancy happened.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!!
I have to say, I did laugh my self when I was writing Kelly's lines, I just love writing for her so I had a lot of fun!
Thank you so much for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2022 10:45 pm Title: The Brief
Aw, Pam’s too humble to call herself a CEO?! That’s just so fitting for her!
I love that she owns her own company, some Fancy New Beesly going on here!
KELLY AND ANGELA ARE BOTH PREGNANT?! WUUUUUUUUT!
Okay, but I love how he handles Karen here, and his lowkey stalking of Pam in the middle of work. That’s hilarious!
You set this up so nicely so far! I can’t wait to see what comes of this! Hopefully a meet-cute?
Author's Response:
I'm glad you thought that about Pam too! I felt it would be pretty true of her to be successful and not really see it
You won't have to wait too long for the meet cute :)
Thanks for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2022 05:46 pm Title: The Brief
So, I really like this concept so far. Pam and the ladies working in one company. Jim and most of the fellas working at another. And now here they are about to work for the same client. That should be a lot of fun.
The marketing terms were fairly clear to understand through context with everything else. I really liked seeing the two different approaches each company is bringing towards the client based on how the two operate. Gotta say I really like both Pam and Jim as CEO's. They both feel very mature and like they're very much in charge of their companies. Karen going after Jim like that seems like it could cause quite a few waves. Especially if Jim's romantic attentions are drifting elsewhere. Really cute that Jim's basically fallen for Pam right from the based on his internet stalking's of her. I wonder if Cathy is also going to be throwing a wrench into things here as well.
Really liked getting the pictures there at the end. Really helped to set the scenes for sure. Also as a guy who's started delving into watches, that watch of Jim's, for 27K! Damn son! You're doing good for yourself if you've got that on your wrist. Really looking forward to seeing where we go with this one. Feels like it's going to be a lot of fun.
Author's Response:
Glad you like this one so far :) you'll be meeting lots more of your faves shortly too!
So happy you liked the different approaches each company took. I had a lot of fun coming up with their strategies!
I wonder what trouble Karen and Kathy could possibly try to cause??
There will be a lot more pictures to come! I've been doing soooo much research for this fic to make it as realistic as possible!
Thanks as always for your review!
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2022 04:18 pm Title: The Brief
This is a very good start to a new fic.
Plus I like the marketing business concept of
the story. I sense some competition between the
two companies and JAM. 🤔
I like how you’ve made Pam more confident and doing a job that she actually loves. We didn’t get that enough in canon. You definitely got the nail on the head with Kelly and Ryan’s relationship.
Also not to mention Karen’s desperation at wanting something real to happen with Jim. So sad.
Please update soon. I’m very curious as to where this going to go. I also like the pictures you have used for Jim/Pam. 🙂
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review!!
I'm glad you like this version of Pam. I wanted just a hint of her uncertainty and things that hold her back in this, but not toooo much!
Yeah, I really dislike Karen, so she's never going to come off well in one of my fics!!
Glad you like the pics, I AGONISED over finding the perfect ones for this fic. There will be a lot more to follow too!
I shall update as soon as I can! This story has been a long time in the making!
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2022 03:54 pm Title: The Brief
Going straight onto the bookshelf! Very intrigued and a great setup!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!! Really hope you like what is to follow!
1 [Report This]Date: April 18, 2022 03:45 pm Title: The Brief
Hellooooo Hello Daddy.
You know I’m a sucker for a ceo Jim.. and with a not ceo ceo Pam as well, that’s just a sign for a good time.
I love our chats, you know I do. But it’s times like this when I wish you were a robot. I know you have a life but man I wish you could bash this out in a day for me to binge.
Looking forward to more. Maybe I can beta properly by the end of this?
Your number one fan, yellowberry
Author's Response:
We can only hope you'll be a proper beta by the end of this. It would be about time.
But I do love our chats too, but you really need to let me write at some point. I shall get on this ASAP as possible
But also, thank you for EVERYTHING that you do