Date: November 20, 2006 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
There are so many great lines in this story, I would have to quote the whole thing back to show you my favourites. If I had to pick, I would say that I especially enjoyed how Jim is constantly searching for ways to move forward, even if he doesn't really connect, because at least it's not backwards.
Great job!
Author's Response:
Yeah, exactly. I just hope he stops long enough to see he doesn't need to jettison everything from before. Anyway, glad that at least you connected. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
You make it look so damn easy, you know that? I wish I could write half as well as well as you do! Thanks so much for sharing this.
Author's Response: What a fabulous compliment moxie! But you already write beautifully! In any case, I'm really glad you liked it. I wasn't too sure about it, to be honest. And thanks for your generous remarks!
9 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
‘Go get your things,’ he says. “I’ll wait for you.’ He's waited this long, he can wait 2 more minutes. ;) That was beautiful. It was nice to get both of their perspectives. I agree that they are both unhappy in this messy situation. Ah, crazy kids! They will work it out.
Author's Response: Yeah, they're both miserable...if only we didn't have to wait for the writers to clean up the mess. Thanks, as always, for being such a great reviewer! This is such a welcoming place.
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
"She’s forgotten whatever she meant to say. He hears her anyway." - words that perfectly describe two people in sync. Thanks for writing this, it gives me hope.
Author's Response: I'm glad you felt that way. Now if only those two lunkheads would realize that they're in sync...we could all relax! Thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 02:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this was so good. It's actually the first post-Merger story I've read, and aside from being beautifully written I really like the way you've worked out the triangle.
Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks, travelingviolet, I'm glad you enjoyed it. That damn triangle. Needed to do something to make it go away!
9 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Your progression here is really nice. Love this:
She crashes to the ground under the weight of all the months when she could have said something. But didn’t. She opens her mouth, but no sound comes out. Her frequency is suddenly an ancient useless thing.
The final section is just about perfect. Nice insight into everyone throughout. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, nomadshan. It really was just meant as a sort of study of their dynamic now (as it could - but, no doubt, won't - progress.) I feel all their pain...no good guy, no bad guy. Oh well. Life - and tv - is a messy business! Thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
‘This is how it’s supposed to be,’ he says, quietly.
She’s forgotten whatever she meant to say. He hears her anyway.
Ohhh that was glorious! Well done, colette. Just what the doctor ordered.
Author's Response: Glad to be of service. I needed a little resolution...so I just made it up! Thanks for the kind review.
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh my god. Beautiful, so gorgeous. The ending is so understated and perfect. Love the glimpses into their heads, too - dead on, as usual. You rock, my dear.
Author's Response: You are such a dependable and supportive reviewer - makes my usual post-post regret so much easier! Glad this spoke to you...anyone looking for a 'plot' won't like it, but you know me - unendingly fascinated by their internal landscape. Thanks so much for going there with me!
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2006 02:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
“I’ll wait for you.’
Gah! That killed me. I love that you showed both sides of the equation. Just lovely.
It's going to be okay I know it. It's the solace we can take in knowing this is a sit-com, not a soap opera. :) I know without a doubt that there's a light at the end of the tunnel. Thanks so much for making it shine for us sooner rather than later. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks. I did this one pretty quickly (for me!) and without too much editing, so I'm glad if it hung together. Sorry about killing you. Any place I can send flowers?
And, know what? Despite all this angry 'side' taking on the discussion board, I do think there are two - equally sad - sides to the story. Both touching and frustrating and...uggh. But, I agree - this ain't no soap, so it can't go on forever (please?) Thanks again for being such a great (and prompt!) reviewer.