10 [Report This]Date: February 27, 2007 09:10 am Title: The shift
Ahhh! I'm actually nervous right now - butterflies, I swear.
First, I wish that all the people who really dislike Pam for not making a move could read this, because yes -- of course she thinks Karen's right for Jim! And I love the way you juxtaposed that realization with her awareness that Jim knew Roy was wrong for her. I've never seen this illustrated so clearly before. (G. Daniels could take a page from your book - no pun intended.)
Loved the way you wrote the break up - I felt suspenseful right along with Pam; it was really an effective technique to leave the audience in the same position as Pam, relegated to just watching and waiting, but unable to actually hear what was happening.
Two lines in this nearly killed me:
"She licked her lips nervously and stepped toward the future." (EEEEEEE!)
"He now knew that sometimes the only truth is what he'd said to Karen (what Pam had said to him):
I can't."
Amen - because ultimately, that's what it will all come down to for Jim, isn't it?
Another brilliant chapter - I'm so excited about reading the next one -----
Author's Response:
I've written one too many Karen/Jim breakup scenes. I decided to let myself off the hook for this one and just let them take care of it without me. :)
Pam said it herself- she thinks Jim and Karen are "great together". She's wrong, of course, but I can totally see why she thinks it. Poor Pam. *sigh* Thank you, again, some more...
Date: February 15, 2007 10:47 am Title: The shift
Holy crap, lis, you've totally been struck by The Muse on this story. Such beautiful symmetry. Love anxious Pam. And Jim turning the hurtful words around and forgiving her for saying them all at the same time. I sure hope we're getting close to "I can"!
Author's Response: Thank you, sweetie. Poor anxious Pam. Confidence just isn't in her DNA, is it? I think she'll really blossom in that way (in all ways) when she and Jim finally hit "I can" (or, even better, "I do!").
10 [Report This]Date: February 14, 2007 04:28 pm Title: The shift
ooh, good for Pam for going to him - but what's next!!!
such good stuff!
Author's Response: One more chapter, methinks. Thanks, moxie!
Date: February 14, 2007 03:36 pm Title: The shift
this has to continue!!!!
Author's Response: Oh, I'll definitely finish! :)