Date: June 11, 2008 08:55 pm Title: High School
Great story! Oh, and the note at the beginning? I just got into John's books this year and I absolutely LOVE them. :) I'm somewhere in the Tomorrow series right now. (And I definitely wish they had an affair, too.)
Author's Response:
I love John Marsden! I've read all of the Tomorrow Series, and I have the first book of the sequel series waiting to be read. Its an addicting series. Depressing a lot of the time (as war tends to be)
Thanks for the review!
Date: March 24, 2007 09:07 am Title: High School
YAY! Karen is outta there! FanFic can get rid of Karen a zillion different ways, why can't GD?
That said, I would really like to read more about why/how Jim got into photography...
Author's Response:
Hum, because he is a great big weeny head.
That is a good idea about trying to explore that... not sure if I will do it justice, depends on how well I think it fits into the flow, but I will try it out.
10 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2007 07:37 am Title: High School
Hey! Mikey Likey...well my names not Mikey but SO WHAT it rhymes. I do like this thought, rating a ten!
Author's Response:
Hehe, you can rename yourself Mikey. I really want my real friend Mikey to start usin that phrase, but he doesn't want to :(
Thanks!
Date: March 24, 2007 06:29 am Title: High School
Jim should take photographs of Pam this afternoon. That's what friends do, right? Take photographs of each other? (...in various stages of undress? Whoops, that'd be "more than that").
One thing I wanted to mention about the dialog is that the Office people (and especially Jim and Pam) generally use contractions. The only time they don't is when they're really trying to accentuate something, like "I cannot believe you said that" or "tragically, I cannot" (Jim to past Jim). When I see "he is planning" or "I am really", it takes me out of the moment a bit, because it's not the way they'd really talk.
I like where this is going!
Author's Response:
hum, me and my friends don't take naked pictures of each other... not sure if i want to know what you and your friends do :P
blah! i thought i caught all of those noncontractions. see, i read it about a thousand times, and i still miss stuff like that. which is odd, because when i really talk (and generally type) i have the worst grammar and phrasing ever. but in here, i am never using contractions... i will try to catch them for upcoming chapters (can't promise anything)
i am trying to decide whether or not to post another chapter today :)