Date: April 17, 2007 10:48 am Title: Unwelcome
I like ow you bring in Michael as a good salesman. They really did show that side of him in The Client. And its true. He couldn't have become a manager if he is an inept as he seems.
One MINOR thing is for the 30,000 copies, I would stick that comma in there... its just my personal preference, though, really.
The bird caught fire!!?!?! Haha! Wait, its horrible that I am laughing at it!
Date: April 10, 2007 11:40 pm Title: Unwelcome
"You don't deserve to smile, Beesly" is the best Jim line I've read in a long, long time.
Date: April 10, 2007 01:44 pm Title: Unwelcome
Hmph. Who is this Dan character and what's he doing to Jim? You've got me, I'm intrigued.
Date: April 08, 2007 10:12 pm Title: Unwelcome
Angry!Jim! Oh, yeah.
I actually don't like Dan, and haven't seen much likable about him to attract Karen and possibly Pam. Maybe I'm just immune to Dan. Not to Legolas, though (no one is). I agree you'd have to bring someone else in; none of our Office guys will do.
Author's Response: Thanks for the insight. He was supposed to be a minimally developed "anti-Roy" but I think he came across as a bit of an arrogant manipulative punk. He'll do, though since he's just here to stir the pot!
Date: April 08, 2007 07:36 pm Title: Unwelcome
Wow -- a very different side of both Jim and Karen -- dark & twisted. Me likey.
And I've officially bought a ticket for wherever this train is headed....
Date: April 08, 2007 06:51 pm Title: Unwelcome
wow, I was wondering what would tip the scales in the other direction. Great story.
Date: April 08, 2007 04:18 pm Title: Unwelcome
Mmmmmm....Legolas. Okay, I can understand the attraction now. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: April 08, 2007 03:11 pm Title: Unwelcome
Go Pam! i want Newjim to get hit by a bus. Great story keep it coming!