Date: April 27, 2007 01:05 pm Title: A Bone to Pick
Wow, it was no problem to control Jim Jr. around Karen; I wonder what that means. Yeah, no I don't.
Jimpalement! "His screw up had given her capital to force him into some relationship talk. Dammit she's brutal."
This is really interesting. I'm not sure Pam actually would have laughed like that, though, although I guess it's possible. I think something like that is funnier if you're watching it. Pam, Karen, and Jim were sort of all involved in that moment. I would think Pam might be embarrassed. Happy that Jim Jr. notices her, but still embarrassed/uncomfortable with the situation in front of cameras and all.
Author's Response:
"I'm not sure Pam actually would have laughed like that, though, although I guess it's possible." You're reviews are always so dead on. This was the most awkward thing to come up with -- I wanted her to be genuinely cool about it (vs. Karen's calculating + opportunistic) but its such a wierd situation to have to write my way out of... this story kindof has a mind of its own now. thanks for the feedback!
Date: April 25, 2007 06:35 am Title: A Bone to Pick
That was hilarious. If I was Pam I would not have been able to hold in the laughter.
Date: April 25, 2007 05:42 am Title: A Bone to Pick
"Don't worry, its totally gone now." - I wonder if Karen will catch the subtext of that one...?
Author's Response: I'm so glad someone mentioned this -- I basically thought of this line first and wrote the chapter backwards from there. Thanks for the feedback!
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 11:59 pm Title: A Bone to Pick
I really like this. You write Karen very humanely, yet let her manipulative b**** side show through too. Keep going!
8 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 09:05 pm Title: A Bone to Pick
Cute story but no offense aren't you a guy? It don't really work like that.. :p
Author's Response: Its definitely not meant to be medically realistic (unless Jim is actually 15 and experimenting w/ viagra).
Date: April 24, 2007 08:27 pm Title: A Bone to Pick
seriously.... jimpalement?! what a way to go...
loving this!