Date: June 15, 2007 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Haha, oh Jonathan and his crazy ex-girlfriends...
The letter Jim wrote was amazing. He should have sent it. After he erased the parts about Karen. And wrote "I still love you."
And thanks for the link! I love when authors do that.
Author's Response:
Ahhh, reading each chapter for the first time, are we! You are awesome! Thank you so much for going to the trouble of reviewing each one- you're totally awesome for doing that. I'm glad you love the links- puts a face to the descriptions, doesn't it?
Date: June 03, 2007 11:03 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Sigh...this seems to be going in a positive direction for Jim & Pam. It's nice seeing Pam happy doing something in art. And I like that Jim isn't completely over Pam...haha..is that mean??
Looking forward to Rome!
Author's Response: Totally not mean! Stay tuned... Rome is coming very, very soon :) (like today... LOL) Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Date: June 01, 2007 08:40 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Oh! This is so fun! I cannot wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I'm glad you're liking it! :)
Date: May 31, 2007 01:24 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
I was trying to respond to your response, but I can't figure out a way to do that. :(
As far as I know, there are no style guides that advise italicizing company names. Italics are generally reserved for major creative works (such as books, newspapers, movies, etc.) and for emphasis. I hate to sound nit-picky because this ultimately isn't that important, but I'm an English prof and it's important to me that people know these things. :)
Again, I really like this story so far!
Author's Response:
Thanks Pseudonym for letting me know. I hadn't realized. I do appreciate the feedback though. Thanks so much and I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)
8 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2007 05:38 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Reading this story, and when you mentioned the text message, i remembered I have a voicemail to respond to... its just confirming my dentist appointment, so, not really fun...but i best do that after this story.
I love that Pam is successful and so good at something arty. My idea of art is a stick figure, and so I can't even WRITE something that could really be considered hinting at art.
So, because Jules video has taken over my brain, when you mention double cheeseburger, I think His Cheeseburger, and I think Pam, and so, Jim is taking a bite out of Pam... :P. Great, now I am going to be singing His Cheeseburger all day. I should go watch the Pirates Video, because I happen to know I am going to be playing Pirates... so, at least that makes sense (because singing about cheeseburgers never makes sense)
Anyways, that letter thing is a good idea. I mean, besides the fact that it is JAM contact, it does make sense.
"Joyce didn’t know how to operate his video camera like Pam had." I love the throwing in of little things like that.
Ick! Hives. I have only had them once before, and not fun.
He didn't send the letter!!!
I can't wait for them to go to Rome! This is awesome.
Author's Response: I'm glad (?) I reminded you of your dentist appointment... I think... LOL But teeth are important. I am excited to hear that you love the way I've represented the art in this story- I'm also a stick figure artist myself (can't draw for crap) so it means a lot to hear that. As for the Burger Barn & Jim's cheeseburger... yeah, totally intentional! LOL I saw Jules' video and I totally put that line in as a shout out to the video. Had I realized at the time that VT go to "Burger Bell" I would have named the restaurant that too. LOL But the double cheeseburger was definitely an intended metaphor, so kudos for catching it! ;-) Thanks for reading and as always, replying. Your reviews are awesome.
10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2007 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
This story is good - it has substance and you've created a good foundation. You need to write faster
Author's Response: LOL! Why do I hear Dwight's voice going "mush, mush" (hee!) Thanks so much for the lovely compliments. I'm happy hear that you're enjoying the story! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2007 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Ah I love it. At first I was a bit worried like I always am about AU-like stories but that all went away very very fast just as I started. What an amazing story so far. It's an amusing and it grabbed me in a wonderful way.
I've really enjoyed reading it thus far. I can't wait to see what else you have in store for our favorite JAM brand. Mucho love.
Author's Response:
Thanks Ren for the great review. I'm glad you weren't scared away by the possibility of it being "AU". I'm super happy you're enjoying it, thanks so much for reading and reviewing. :)
Date: May 30, 2007 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Please continue (and soon)! The Toy Story bit was an especially nice touch.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much. I hope to have an update for Sunday. I'm happy to hear you liked the Toy Story bit. I thought the prank was especially Jim, no? It's definitely the type of film I could see Jim & Pam going to. Thank you for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate hearing from you. :)
Date: May 30, 2007 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
yay! ooh this is gonna be fun.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing my fic.
10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2007 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Being from Buffalo, and being in Buffalo now, makes me adore this story even more. It's incredibly well done, perfectly written, and intriguing in its story line. I can't wait for you to update and I'm so happy that someone finally represented B-Lo.
Author's Response: Whoot! B-Lo in da house! Like any good Canadian, I enjoy my lovely shopping trips across the border, and I figured what better place to put Pam- especially with the revamp of the city (it was just in our news here recently). I'm guessing you've seen/heard of the disaster that is The Lenox? LOL I'm glad you feel I'm doing your city justice. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: May 30, 2007 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
i am so excited to read about them in Rome. Please update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. Next chapter will find our fave couple in Rome. Glad to hear you're enjoying it. :)
Date: May 30, 2007 11:12 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
I just love this. Love it love it love it.
Author's Response:
...and I love awesome reviews from readers! :) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: May 30, 2007 10:40 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Ohhh this is going too be good! I love your writing style, and Jim's letter rang so true to character. Can't wait to see where this is going!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you found Jim's letter to have rang true. When I wrote it I literally just closed my eyes and pretended for a second that I was Jim... what would I say. I'm so relieved to hear that it works for you. Thank you for the beautiful compliment about my writing- I think you just might have made my day. :-)
Date: May 30, 2007 08:55 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Wow! This is so good! Jim's attempt at writing the email got me a little choked up. Our poor hurting kids! I'm so glad Pam didn't up and leave like in this story, but it's so realistic that she might have. And they both would still look back on it with some heartbreak.
Please continue to mention in TWoP when there's an update; I really don't want to miss updates to this.
Author's Response: I definitely will continue to mention it on TWoP! Thanks so much for the awesome compliments. I often wonder what Jim would have done had Pam left, I'm glad that his reaction is plausible and realistic. Thanks for reading and I'm soooo happy you're enjoying it.
Date: May 30, 2007 07:55 am Title: Chapter 2: Let Love In
Sigh. Loving this. First, props to you for creating such a plausible scenario for Pam to end up in Rome - nice details there. And Jim's email...wow. It shows a really nice progression of his feelings - from casual to guarded to completely vulnerable, unable to keep up the facade of "just saying hey." So, so sad - and so sad that he stopped writing it, tried to put it out of his mind. (And love the voice there for Jim - perfect!)
You're really setting the stage nicely for all the awesomeness to come, I tell you....
Author's Response:
My very favourite person! Yay! You are a million times over my hero. It partially broke my heart to have him close the browser window- but I've done it so many times myself. Thanks so much for being the head cheerleader. I'm completely overwhelmed by all the positive reviews. C'è un posto dove sedersi?