9 [Report This]Date: June 09, 2007 02:20 pm Title: modern romance
This does seem a little Melrose Place-y now. Good call. However, I have faith everything will start going better for our beloved JAM. I too can't wait to see Jim's house.
BTW Melrose place is a really good show.
10 [Report This]Date: June 09, 2007 12:54 am Title: modern romance
Ohhh my gosh! This chapter was frickin' rad! Karen and Toby!! And Karen. . .what a hussy! Awesome job! I'm looking forward to an update. I really liked the Mother-daughter relationship in here. It reminds me of me and my mom.
Mom: "What do you want to do?"
Me. *bursts into tears* "I DON'T KNOW!"
Fantastic!
Date: June 08, 2007 10:32 pm Title: modern romance
omfg!!! toby and karne!?!?!?!? that is the biggest twist EVER!! so awesome!
Date: June 08, 2007 10:25 pm Title: modern romance
OH please continue. It is definetly interesting and different. Poor Jim and Pam Caught beneathy a rock and a hard place. grrr...i wanna rip out karen's hair!!! i can't wait for her to get her own. looking forward to the next part.
Date: June 08, 2007 09:12 pm Title: modern romance
I think Jim would stand up for himself a little more. I think he would have told karen off and gone through corporate to tell them about what has been happening, maybe going to Wallace. But who knows. Deffinately a little less dramaesque.
Author's Response: Oh, just wait. Believe me, that's coming. :)
8 [Report This]Date: June 08, 2007 07:08 pm Title: modern romance
*cough* Toby is NOT UGLY
But I hope you write more :-D
Author's Response: haha. I don't think Toby is ugly either! But keep in mind that paragraph was through the ideas of Cassandra the New Intern - and she thinks Creed is hot! :P
Date: June 08, 2007 06:42 pm Title: modern romance
I think this would be Jim and Pam's worst nightmare....pretty fun though...
Just a few notes when we met Pam's Mom on the show she had aburn hair and Toby doesn't have an office...he chose to sit at an open desk without a cubicle to get away from Kelly :-) The reason I point these out is because I'm enjoying your story and these inacuracies take me out of the story.
BTW someone knowing who Creed is AND having a crush on him, is so disturbing and hilarious at the same time... :-D
Author's Response:
hey, thanks! i knew pam's mom was on the show... i guess she could've dyed it, right?
and good point about Toby, too.
Date: June 08, 2007 06:12 pm Title: modern romance
i like it. update soon.
Date: June 08, 2007 05:58 pm Title: modern romance
My mouth is hanging open. Just...wow. To answer your questions, I don't think this is too emo-y or even too melrose place. I mean, there is a minor soapish element but I think that adds a kind of black humor to it. I usually have difficulties with stories that pin Karen as the villain, but I find myself enjoying your unflinching version. And I also find myself rooting for a kind of revenge, but not knowing what exactly. I'll leave it to you. I like your style and I really look forward to what is coming next.
Date: June 08, 2007 05:52 pm Title: modern romance
No, I think this is great.....I'd love to see David Wallace's Reaction when he finds out Pam got fired and Karen and Toby are sleeping together....OH it'll be better than when Sigorney Weaver was told to get her boney ass outta the CEO's sight in Working Girl! This fic has that feel to it. Yeah. :)