Date: August 04, 2007 05:23 am Title: Thursday
uhh... the last chapters- 7 and 8. Is this like a badfic? Because seriously the quotes they use? And Jim puts Pams hand on his pants like every 4 seconds. I really don't think Jim and Pam would act like that. No offense, but seriously the one liners are terrible! Please take the advice, and do something about those quotes.
Date: July 06, 2007 12:49 pm Title: Thursday
i'm enjoying the story, but it's extremely difficult to read. there are no paragraph breaks, or breaks between the dialogue, and it's really easy to get lost.
Author's Response: Thanks. I appear to be having some technical difficulties. If you know where I can find a willing beta reader, please let me know.
Date: July 05, 2007 10:09 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dinner Conversation
Thank you so much for the acknowledgement! I'm touched! This chapter is good. The dialogue is totally believable. A little hard to follow though. You might want to split the quotes up on separate lines so it's easier to see who is saying what. I like it though!
Date: July 05, 2007 08:39 pm Title: First Date Jitters
Wow pamcasso, I'm absolutely loving your story. Please, please keep writing. Favourite line...this was a hug full of love, full of promise... I can't wait for more.
p.s. while I use the name 'jinx' on MTT, I go by whichonespam on the NBC and TWoP MBs
Hey whichonespam!!! Thanks very much for your kind words. Nice "seeing" you over here.