8 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Destination
Excellent job Larry. This story always brings a silent tear to my eye, sometimes sad, sometimes happy but it's always worth it.
Date: August 27, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Destination
I didn't want to read this story, Larry, but I decided to give it a shot, and I'm glad I did. Opposites attract and I think these two illustrate that. And the idea that Angela is the one to bring Jim "back" is very sweet. I'd like to think someone who is so religious also has it in her to be so kind.
However, I wish you had spent a little more time dealing with how they fell for each other. The scene where Jim gives Angela a piggy back ride was really nice and I would have liked to see more examples of what they see in each other. Also, it seemed like Jim really didn't think about Pam much once he and Angela got together. Maybe that's realistic, I'm not sure. But the romantic in me wanted to see a little inner struggle over the fact that Jim had fallen for someone else.
All that being said, this was an enjoyable read! Is it sick that after all this I still didn't really want Angela and Jim to end up together? This is why I don't venture much out of my fic comfort zone :-)
Date: August 27, 2007 10:19 am Title: Destination
After reading the first chapter of this when you first wrote it, I felt a lot of trepidation... I am not so comfortable with killing Jim or Pam (makes me cry!), but I just read it all, and it was really beautifully done. Very well thought out and all in character. I think this last chapter is just an excellent piece of writing... with the surprise ending (perfect last line) and at the party you have everyone's voice down so perfectly.
As a whole a really lovely story and I am extremely glad I read it. Thanks!!
Date: August 27, 2007 07:09 am Title: Destination
eventually when to Ryan - eventually WENT to Ryan?
Jim got a new job.... he managed to answer te question how David Wallace wanted.
She closed the door on him. My heart sank. It wasn't ideal, but... :(
Michael has said a lot of stupid things, but he is right - that was wise.
And Angelas in the car with him :D
Date: August 27, 2007 06:30 am Title: Destination
Nicely done, larry! I've been a big fan of this story from the beginning, and I'm glad to see you've finally come back to wrap things up. :) I've always liked your characterizations of Angela and Jim in this one, as they were believable without becoming "cartoonish" (which is sometimes the tendency to do with Angela).
One thing that left me confused was the very end, though. If Angela was the one who rejected Jim, why was she suddenly in the car with him at the end? Did I miss a paragraph? Not trying to be difficult, but just a little confused.
Otherwise, great job!
Author's Response:
No, I left out the part where she changes her mind to set up the surprise at the end. I tried to set it up in two ways - by making her uncertain about her decision to reject him when she was talking to Pam, and with Michael's "never, ever give up" advice. Guess I wasn't completely successful with that.
Thanks for being such a big supporter of the story! I appreicate all of your feedback.
Date: August 27, 2007 12:40 am Title: Destination
Larry? Is Angela in the car with him or is it ghostPam? You had me up until there... Did he pick up Angela? Did she hide in his car? That may be a little too cryptic.
Other than the surprise ending which I don't understand, it was really good!
Author's Response:
Sorry about that, Kev. You're not the first person to think that. I thought the line sounded enough like bossy Angela. I have changed it to make it clear that it's her. As to how she ended up there, I left that part intnetionally vague to spring the surprise, but sometime after he left Dunder-Mifflin, he heeded Michael's advice and convinced her to come with him.
Thanks for supporting this story the whole time. Sorry for the confusing ending. Hopefully uou like the edited version better!