Date: August 03, 2007 05:07 am Title: Reality Sets In
The only thing I would suggest so far (and this is SO so minor, its just a personal preference of mine), is naming chapters. Not just chapter one and chapter two... but things like "after the call" or something like that. I don't know. I have fun making up chapter titles when i write. But, that is all. I just wanted to suggest it since it is your first time with fics.
I would say at least Michael won't start kissing and dating his new boss like he did Jan, but I can certainly imagine he might want to.
You really have the Jim/Pam banter down, which is great.
Wow, what an end. I totally understand it, but still whoa.
Author's Response: I will definitely think about chapter titles. I see in hindsight a few little things I want to clean up in general. I'm usually pretty anal, so the little imperfections drive me nuts. And chapter titles would help make it more orderly. I honestly didn't even know how to do chapter titles until I was in the fourth chapter or so. I'm so green!
I really appreciate hearing that you liked the Jim/Pam banter. I was a little concerned with getting it down, which is part of the reason I liked doing a non Jim/Pam story on my first time out. I really wanted to get it right when I did use them, because I enjoy them so much.
Date: July 12, 2007 10:51 pm Title: Reality Sets In
wow, those last few paragraphs are probably the best idea for the beginning of S4 I have seen yet. I think that Jim could easily have an "epiphery" very much like that when he finds out about the Temp. Great stuff.
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words. Once I started writing, I felt how much Jim was putting into this relationship. Not that his dream per se had been a corporate job, but I think he just jumped on a romantic whim which may or may not pay off. Either way, once the adrenaline of the whole thing wears off, I am interested to see where that leaves him.