10 [Report This]Date: September 22, 2007 09:41 pm Title: 12:00 AM
I'm loving this. Is it weird though that I hear the loud clock ticking at the very end - like on 24?
Seriously - this is such a great idea. I like fics that veer away from the real events of CN. It's interesting to see what could/would have happened if Jim had approached it differently! More soon please!
8 [Report This]Date: September 22, 2007 05:26 pm Title: 12:00 AM
Hey Wendy Blue, I would def start adding the a.m.'s so down the line it will be easier. I love this story! Do you have eveything planned out or are you winging it like Jim & Pam?
Date: September 22, 2007 05:03 pm Title: 12:00 AM
LOVE it!!!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks as always Donnelly :)
Date: September 22, 2007 10:06 am Title: 12:00 AM
Hi, Wendy Blue! I'm catching up a little bit with fic-reading...
I'm really enjoying this so far. I think it's so likely that Jim would have told Pam about transferring on Casino Night - the confession sure surprised me! This is a really good alternate take!
I'd add AM or PM to the little time-stamp on the end, so it's really clear.
Nice job on this.
Author's Response: Thanks TLK! I was a little wary to throw out yet another version of Casino Night, but this story was in my head begging to be written and I just couldn't say no. So glad you're enjoying it! :)
Date: September 22, 2007 05:23 am Title: 12:00 AM
now I sort of want to try Wendy's fries dipped in frosty. But only if I can share them with Jim....
Author's Response: Ditto :) Thanks for reading, lisahoo!
Date: September 22, 2007 04:27 am Title: 12:00 AM
I have to come down on the side with Jim on the whole French fry in the Frosty being gross debate, fo sho. All my friends seem to love it, and they always tell me "You have to try it," and I have, and I think it's gross. But this is not Cousin Mose story hour, this is "Tell Swiff how awesome her latest chapter is hour," which, really, is pretty much going to be every review from here on out, so... :)
A couple of really fantastic lines stood out to me in this chapter, especially "the way all the breathing in the car seems to have stopped," and, "it's prom night all over again and I'm holding the keys to a hotel room." Just amazing how you capture the tension and angst of these two and make them so believable. Well, maybe it's not amazing; since you're a brilliant writer, maybe it's just to be expected. Yeah, let's go with that. :)
Oh, and if Wendy Blue owned Wendy's, she'd be in the GREEN! BWAHAHAHAHAAAA!!
*ahem*
'Scuse me. I'll just be over here.
Author's Response: See, this is what happens when you review in the wee hours of the morning ;) Only kidding, Mosemobile (haha, get it?); I'm so glad to hear that you think this is still ringing true. Thanks for taking the time to read this even in the midst of your exile :) You rock!