Date: October 28, 2007 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
Awww, poor Jim is about to get CRUSHED.
But how does he handle the realization? That is what I want to explore in the final chapter. I don't think he handles the news in the same manner as most guys would.
Date: October 28, 2007 06:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
Uh oh. Our boy's just about to be smacked in the face with The Roy Factor! And he hasn't even had a chance to talk to Pam yet! Congrats on your first story, Darb! I loved both of these chapters - there's a very nice rhythm in your writing and I like Mark and Jim's exchange very much. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. The impetus behind this story was what if the thought never crossed his mind that Pam was engaged?
Date: October 27, 2007 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
You did so much with so few words here, I absolutely love it! Can't wait to see what you have in store :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm pretty pleased with the response so far. I'm working on the second part right now.
Date: October 27, 2007 05:37 am Title: Chapter 1
This is a promising beginning for a lot of reasons, but mostly I really like your narratorial voice. I can't quite put my finger on why, but something about your construction makes me think of Garcia Marquez. (That is a compliment, heh.) Anyway, I'm looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you for the positive remarks. I have to admit that I've never read anything by Garcia Marquez, but I'll trust that it is a compliment. :)
Date: October 26, 2007 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, i loved it. Already...with such a short chapter, i'm hooked. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. I was a bit hesitant to post such a short beginning, but after a few re-writes, I decided to break up the story, rather than post it as a oneshot.