Date: December 17, 2007 06:58 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Okay, Sweetpea, I'm back to finish reading this wonderful story!
This chapter was surprisingly tender, considering it was a Jim-centric chapter. So many great moments here, from the wonderfully hot little glimpse into how much Jim likes to hear Pam call his name (yowza!), to the interaction between Jim and Pam and Jim's parents.
Again, your talent for keeping the feel and tone of this story so real just keeps shining through here. And perhaps it's resonating with me because of how many similarities I'm seeing with my own life. My dad "fell in love" with Mrs. Mose the instant he saw her, and he treats her EXACTLY how Jim's dad treats Pam. :)
And I really love the advice and perspective that Jim's dad is able to share. This is a really complicated problem that Jim and Pam are dealing with, and it's nice they have people in their lives to help them out.
Great chapter!
Author's Response:
I can't think of anything better than walking through this story with you chapter by chapter. Thank you so much for doing this.
I loved writing the conversation between Jim and his parents. My family was definitely a "kitchen table" family and it almost made me feel like I was sitting with my folks again, chatting, and getting advice. It's so nice to read about your Dad and Mrs. Mose...how wonderful for all of you they have that kind of relationship.
Jim making Pam call his name...totally selfish paragraph, so I'm thrilled it, um, works from the male perspective, too. I think that little interlude helped to set the mood for how unaware those kinds of frantic calls can catch you and yank you into attention. But, who am I kidding? It was a little gratuitous and I am totally fine with that. :-)
Reading these reviews is not only boosting my confidence (thank you for that) it's giving me a break from Chapter 9 which seems to want to tie me up in knots. This is easier and way, way more fun!
10 [Report This]Date: December 08, 2007 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
this was so great. You are really doing a great job portraying Pam's whole passion for art. And Good Will Hunting is my favorite movie EVER so I loved that bit!!
Author's Response: Aw, Sharipep, thank you so much for this review! I'm really enjoying writing this. It's a big step for me to write something this long with an actual plot. I can't tell you how much I appreciate hearing that you're enjoying it. I love Good Will Hunting, too, so it was fun to work that in. Thanks again.
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
That was a beautiful chapter. Every nuance of it. So glad I discovered this story.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you did, too, albie_! So far, this chapter gave me the biggest headache, so I'm very happy you enjoyed it. I hope I didn't jinx myself by saying that because I don't want to know any more than I already do about Pam's creative slump! Thank you so much for the review!
Date: December 07, 2007 02:21 pm Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Oh, I loved this!
Please keep adding!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, TotoDarling! What a great screenname! I'll be updating within the next couple of days, I hope. See you then!
Date: December 07, 2007 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
great chapter! i love the direction you've taken with this story. well done! can't wait for more!
Author's Response: That's so great to hear (read?), I_Still_Believe, because this is a little darker than anything I've done. It's not the usual Jim-Pam angst and there are so many other writers who have done that far better than I could. Besides, I'm still recovering from the angst of S2 Jim and S3 Pam! And then the damned strike cut my recovery short! I'm off work until next Wednesday, so I hope to have at least one more chapter up by then. Thank you for the review!
Date: December 07, 2007 12:03 pm Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
I LOVE IT! seriously? Jim is SO cute with his parents! I love the way you've written them. just... precious! This is a great chapter of flashback to the beginnings of their relationship, and I love seeing him learn from his parents' marriage. you're amazing.
Author's Response: So nice to read this, rulesofjinx, and thank you so much for leaving reviews. It was fun to write about Pam meeting the Halperts and I always imagined that they would love her just like Jim does. Mr. Halpert, the Elder...I can't help it, he's pretty much my Dad and even though my Mom didn't have a single creative bone in her tiny Italian body, this is what I imagine it would have been like with them. For better or for worse, right? Thank you for all the encouragement, I really appreciate it!
Date: December 07, 2007 10:16 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Absolutely, positively, painfully, perfectly, impossibly lovely. Well done, my friend. I loved how you wrote that love scene, and the dynamic between the Old Halperts and Young Halperts was fantastic in its realism. Great job!!! -CH
Author's Response:
I'm not ashamed to admit that I squealed a little when I read this review, CH! Nothing better than reading something like this from someone who has given me SO MUCH pleasure from her own writing. Jim and Pam needed a little lovin' here and I'm so glad you liked it because that one paragraph probably got fiddled with more than anything. I appreciate your sweet words so much and thank you for the awesome rec on the boards, too
Date: December 07, 2007 09:32 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Almost forgot: "I asked her if she was dreaming about Matt Damon again and she said ‘yeah…how do you like them apples?’" LOVE that line from the movie. Always makes me smile.
Author's Response: TWO? Tuna, are you kidding me? You're so...GREAT. And I LOVE that line from the movie, too! I think I fell in love with Matt Damon in that moment!
Date: December 07, 2007 09:04 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Oh, Miss Pam. When I was pregnant with my second I lost all my creative energy. I know just how she feels. And you can want everything to stay the same, but once that child comes, your priorities change so much and things that were once such a big deal don't seem so important.
Even though they are tough times, it is so encouraging to see Mr. & Mrs. Halpert making their way through the world. Sigh.
Author's Response: Lisahoo, never having been pregnant my own self, I only have the stories of others to go on, so I'm thrilled that you connect with what Pam's going through. She's got a great cheering section with Jim and his folks, though, so I think she's going to be okay. Thank you so much for the review. I've said it before, but it bears repeating: you are such a wonderful reviewer and I appreciate seeing your comments so much.
Date: December 07, 2007 09:03 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
Sweetpea, this warmed my heart and broke it at the same time. So dang good! You have such a knack for capturing Jim's personality, and I love his parents : ) Thanks for this update.
Author's Response: Oh, Nan, thank you so much for the sweet review! I was afraid that Jim's parents might be a little too prickly with each other, but Jim has such a quick, sarcastic wit and such a fun back-and-forth with Pam, that he must have grown up with that dynamic between his parents. Challenging to write characters we've never seen, but the Halperts were a lot of fun to write!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2007 08:59 am Title: Chapter 5 - That's When I Need My Father's Eyes
i love the way jim's parents banter and bicker and finally come to rest with jim and pam...especially in this line they’ve seen this storm come and go and I would be wise to keep my mouth shut and listen for once.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, CashBasket! I struggled trying to imagine Jim's parents without interjecting a bit of my own into them. Jim's Dad is quite a lot like my own father was...a bit crusty on the outside, with a gooey, melty inside and always ready with the advice about treating each other with kindness and sometimes having to give the whole 100% to the marriage when your spouse is going through a rough time. I'm glad you're reading and enjoying this!