Date: December 10, 2007 01:40 pm Title: Jim
Meeting for coffee when pregnant! Uht oht!
7 [Report This]Date: December 10, 2007 01:15 pm Title: Jim
Uh oh. Please update soon, it's chilly out here hanging from this cliff! (And it isn't confusing at all.)
Date: December 10, 2007 10:49 am Title: Jim
No, it's not confusing; I can follow it fine. :)
You might want to use contractions a bit more, though. It's the way we all talk, and it's a little bit jarring to read 'there is something' and 'that is just one...' There's a little typo here: "She has always manages."
I'm interested to see what happens next! I can't imagine having to have 'that' kind of discussion with an old boyfriend, especially when the end wasn't really mutual. YIKES!
Good job!
10 [Report This]Date: December 10, 2007 08:35 am Title: Jim
oh the suspence! excellent chapter! can't wait for more!
Date: December 10, 2007 06:23 am Title: Jim
Not confusing. In a word? Awesome.
Can't wait for more! -CH
8 [Report This]Date: December 10, 2007 05:39 am Title: Jim
I didn't find it confusing. Good chapter. Of course, you left me holding my breath! More soon please?