Date: February 20, 2008 08:49 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
Wow, poor Pam and poor everyone, really. SO glad it didn't go this way, but you're writing it realistically. I definitely think she'd first try to move out and figure things out rather than just saying "That's it! We're getting a divorce!"
You're doing a really good job with this.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2008 08:43 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
OK, I need to lie down. That was tense. Great job.
Date: February 20, 2008 08:01 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
Petty--I got up early to finish writing a paper, but then I saw you'd updated and the paper somehow got forgotten. Oh well. I really enjoyed this chapter (of course), and I think you've chosen an interesting way to move this story along. I suppose we expected Pam to ask for a divorce or leave Roy, but you've subtly folded it into a wonderfully emotional story arc for our leading lady (as opposed to her just leaving and that being that). The scene in the park was terrifyingly perfect, and I just hope Karen doesn't get too comfortable with that hand-holding anytime soon. You've done a great job with this, and congrats on your first MTT ribbon!
Can't wait for more! -CH
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2008 07:58 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
I really like the way you ended this story. You made it very realistic with Pam trying to find herself instead of asking Roy for a divorce, leaving, and running to Jim's arms. You made me feel bad for both Roy and Pam, which is something that rarely happens. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read the next chapter!