Date: February 22, 2008 02:14 pm Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
Can't wait!! Great story!!
10 [Report This]Date: February 22, 2008 01:15 pm Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
Yeah!!!! He finally said okay!! Now why the hell couldn't they do that on the show!!
10 [Report This]Date: February 22, 2008 08:48 am Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
I can't say enough about how good this is. The characters are dead on perfect, and I really like how you portray Roy in this story. He's sympathetic, but you can clearly tell how wrong he is for her, without making the reader hate him. Well done!
10 [Report This]Date: February 22, 2008 08:48 am Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
“I was wondering…if you wanted to get coffee later. With me. Please.”
Her last word warbled ever so slightly and was filled with enough fear that Jim knew her asking took more guts than he figured she was capable of.
"Okay."
THANK YOU, PETTY. I have to go to class, but seriously, I'm on tenterhooks. Love this story so much! -CH
10 [Report This]Date: February 22, 2008 08:16 am Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
Love these two chapters--very insightful in my opinion. The twists and turns keep it very interesting. Pam's mom IS great : )
Date: February 22, 2008 08:12 am Title: Is she everything you wanted her to be?
aww...loved it all...just read it and can't wait for more!!
Date: February 21, 2008 09:00 pm Title: But the words are only in my head
Love this story so much, my friend. Keep it coming. -CH
10 [Report This]Date: February 21, 2008 05:57 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
What an incredible story you have here! You're angst is so delicious! I just love the story and can't wait to see where it goes. I'm thrilled that you didn't make Roy the bad guy. Well written with believable characterization and a great story line. This one has it all. I can't wait to for the rest.
Date: February 20, 2008 06:59 pm Title: When you walk away
“You’d follow me to Scranton for nothing more than a chance?” I can totally believe she'd say this and then turn it into the "I moved from Connecticut" from Traveling Salesman.
And yeah, she's still in the picture. ;)
Interesting conversation with Jan. I like it -- he's got little choice but Scranton or quitting D.M.
Date: February 20, 2008 04:17 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
Absolutely love Jim's mom. I'm looking forward to Jim's return. Not so much Karen.
Date: February 20, 2008 04:03 pm Title: When you walk away
I won't throw things, but the fact that Karen's tagging along like a doormat gives me cause to keep my projectiles close at hand. We'll decide for sure after the next chapter.
Keep up the great work! -CH
Date: February 20, 2008 01:44 pm Title: When you walk away
Guh. You're killing me. Excellent update. I love the dialog between Jim and his mom. Such a spunky woman : ) I will refrain from throwing things at this time since I sense a glimmer of hope. *bites nails*
Date: February 20, 2008 08:49 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
Wow, poor Pam and poor everyone, really. SO glad it didn't go this way, but you're writing it realistically. I definitely think she'd first try to move out and figure things out rather than just saying "That's it! We're getting a divorce!"
You're doing a really good job with this.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2008 08:43 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
OK, I need to lie down. That was tense. Great job.
Date: February 20, 2008 08:01 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
Petty--I got up early to finish writing a paper, but then I saw you'd updated and the paper somehow got forgotten. Oh well. I really enjoyed this chapter (of course), and I think you've chosen an interesting way to move this story along. I suppose we expected Pam to ask for a divorce or leave Roy, but you've subtly folded it into a wonderfully emotional story arc for our leading lady (as opposed to her just leaving and that being that). The scene in the park was terrifyingly perfect, and I just hope Karen doesn't get too comfortable with that hand-holding anytime soon. You've done a great job with this, and congrats on your first MTT ribbon!
Can't wait for more! -CH
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2008 07:58 am Title: So you won't hear me scream
I really like the way you ended this story. You made it very realistic with Pam trying to find herself instead of asking Roy for a divorce, leaving, and running to Jim's arms. You made me feel bad for both Roy and Pam, which is something that rarely happens. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Date: February 19, 2008 07:52 pm Title: And I hold my breath
What? How is Jim taking a chance on Karen "things looking up"? This is egregious!! Just kidding. ;)
Poor Jim. What a terrible situation to be in. If Pam had married Roy, it would be way too painful for Jim to work at DM Scranton again. :(
Nice job, Petty!
Date: February 19, 2008 07:46 pm Title: and I watch you leave
The end of this especially is heartbreaking, but really good.
My nitpick is that it's cold out and no one mulches in the winter. At least I don't think anyone mulches in the winter. True confession -- I don't really know that much about mulching, but it seems no one would do it at Thanksgiving.
Author's Response: Ha. I fixed that part, since I don't know either. I'm a Texas girl. It smells like mulch at every playground I've ever been to! I didn't even think that it might not up north.
Date: February 19, 2008 07:38 pm Title: So I let you go
Super-angsty and complex! I'm so glad it didn't go this way, but if Pam had married Roy, I could certainly see these sorts of emotions in both of them.
I found especially compelling the part about Pam realizing she was ruining her marriage, and how Roy had been trying.
Date: February 19, 2008 03:20 pm Title: And I hold my breath
Please, please happy ending....
Date: February 19, 2008 01:05 pm Title: And I hold my breath
Really well written, but I'm so frustrated. Makes me want to throw a lawn dart at Karen. That's reasonable, right?
Author's Response: That's more reasonable than I was during S3 :)
Date: February 19, 2008 01:00 pm Title: And I hold my breath
Petty--I swear, you can't make this one of those realistic "Jim moves on and finds happiness with another stories." I'm as nervous as Jim at that dinner table right now, thinking that's what you're gonna do. I hope he's leaving her at the bus station.
I'm on the edge of my seat here. More more more! -CH
Author's Response: Hah. I guess you'll have to just wait and see. Kidding - anyone who watches the show know Jim and Pam belong together. They just need a little help getting over themselves first!
Date: February 19, 2008 10:00 am Title: and I watch you leave
Excellent!
Author's Response: I appreciate that, thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 09:24 am Title: and I watch you leave
This was amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate you saying so
10 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 08:39 am Title: and I watch you leave
Oh my god, SO true to character. This was so intense, I just wanted to cry. I can see how it would be hard to write, but you did such a fine job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for saying that. I'm glad it was realistic enough