10 [Report This]Date: April 12, 2008 01:25 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
You know, if I keep reading your fic I'm eventually going to ensure a complete lobotomy -- because every time you post a new chapter, there is an explosion in my head and I lose a chunk of brain function from the intense amazingness of it all. WOW.
These last two chapters were so good and hot and sweet and sexy and romantic and erotic and emotional that I could be here all night quoting them. So I won't. Instead, I'll highlight what I consider to be the two best parts:
He’s just so…earnest, sometimes. He’s so good looking and earnest and he’s like a chocolaty bad boy with a delicious soft peanut butter center. He’s a rebel who’s actually a hero who’s actually just total eye candy. I loved this because it's like Pam is finally seeing, REALLY seeing, all of Jim. Good, bad or indifferent, it's all of what makes Jim Jim and what makes her want him and love him. And you did it in a way that was both humorous and sweet.
She briefly wonders if she should be more level headed about this, but it’s like for the past two weeks someone has been stretching her taut like a rubber band and now finally they’ve pulled just tight enough and she wants so badly to snap. I swear to god, if that isn't the best damn description of UST, I don't know what is. An absolutely fucking brilliant description of such a terribly delicious feeling -- it slays, it kills, it makes your readers want to kill you for ending the chapter there.
But not. 'Cause we need more. Like stat.
Anyway, as always I bow to your brilliance and beg you to put us out of our misery with hot and sweaty JAM sex really, really, REALLY soon.
Pretty please? With tall and gorgeous naked Jim on top?
Date: April 11, 2008 10:14 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Yumm, that chapter was just hot and lovely. I just knew Jim was going to show up at her place. Looking forward to Jim proving how good he is. I'll bet Ms. Beesly has a few tricks up her sleeve too.
Date: April 11, 2008 08:21 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Guhhhh
Suchhhh an awesome chapter!! I LOVE hot!JAM, but I also adored the bit of Pam at home being all cutesy and romantic thinking about Jim. I haven't reviewed in a while, but this is such a fantastic story and I always look forward to your updates!
Looking forward to the....you know ;)
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2008 05:00 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Such a mean, mean place to leave a girl hanging...
Date: April 11, 2008 08:37 am Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Okay, I've reread (wowzie. even hotter the second time) and am back with specifics, in no particular order -- just stuff I particularly liked (and I really liked all of it). It's quite a list:
Date: April 11, 2008 08:05 am Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Oh boy...look out, you know what's coming.
Jim is...or will be. Great chapter. Steamy doesn't even cover it.
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Date: April 11, 2008 06:46 am Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Omigod...Iwanttodiethisissogooooooood. Wow. Waiting...
P.S. Too many good lines to quote, but this one stands out: He’s so good looking and earnest and he’s like a chocolaty bad boy with a delicious soft peanut butter center. Da-amn and yum.
Date: April 10, 2008 11:13 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
"I'm sorry, I just...um...I..." he swallows and his eyebrows dip down a little with his own thoughts, until finally he braces himself and finishes the sentence. "...want you," he confesses like he has to spit it out or it'll eat him f
rom the inside out, and her eyes widen. "I can't help it."
WOW...quite possibly the hottest words ever written. I'm sorry...I just want you? Are you kidding me Stablergirl (Tuna). I mean honestly, that is a classic. And the way I heard it in my head was the same way he told her that he loved her in that parking lot. Seriously...that was just AWESOME.
Date: April 10, 2008 08:42 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
Stablergirl, I'm telling you I've got this down to a science. If I post something, chances are you will too. So it's a win-win (win) situation. You keep me writing, and I get to read this amazing story! LOVE this chapter. Hot, double hot, and tomorrow I shall spell out why. But for now, I'm just going to go read it again. Thank you for making my night!
Date: April 10, 2008 08:25 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
NO! I can't believe you stopped the chapter there!! My brain has liquefied...goodness gracious. That was a ridiculous amount of hotness right there. Umm...update quickly? LOL Not sure I can handle waiting for the next chapter.
"It's so predictable she has to remind herself that none of this is scripted." I LOVE that line. The sheer brilliance of your writing is that you always keep that theme in there of them not really knowing where the show ends and they begin. Sometimes it's more obvious, sometimes it's subtle but it's always there underlying their motivations and actions.
Can't wait for the next part lol ;)
Date: April 10, 2008 07:39 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
SO HOT! you are the devil....i love it
Date: April 10, 2008 07:03 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
"She’s had some vodka. She gets vulgar when she’s tipsy."
I like how you turned something dirty into something sweet. Great chappie! Looking forward to more!
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2008 06:48 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Okay, I have no doubt the next chapter will be hot, hot hot. That being said, I really appreciated the callback to the parking lot in this chap and seeing that Pam remembers that, because I feel like we don't know for sure how she feels yet. Once they have sex, what will she be thinking???
Can't wait to find out and I hope that they finally talk all the way soon, like Pam says in this chap. she keeps thinking things but not saying them.
Also - YOU ARE AWESOME.
Date: April 10, 2008 06:39 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
TUNA ARE YOU KIDDING ME?!?!
This is Egregious! Egregious I say!! god i love it though.. um wow.. just brain dead... and i don't know how i'm going to be able to watch TO with this running through my head. fsdfdss ::dead::
Date: April 10, 2008 06:35 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
.....ah....ah....wow
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2008 05:47 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
OMG! I'm so brain dead. I love that you updated this story before "Dinner Party" started. It just makes this night even more perfect. You are such a tease I can't believe that you ended it before things got really good. ;0( Ok so my favorite parts:
He’s so good looking and earnest and he’s like a chocolaty bad boy with a delicious soft peanut butter center. He’s a rebel who’s actually a hero who’s actually just total eye candy.
She pulls it open and it’s like the 2 AM hazy fog is slapped off of her because she’s all Bette Davis in her satin pajamas and he is…he is standing there all Jim Halpert in his t-shirt and jeans and he’s just so good looking and tall that she thinks she might be dreaming.
“I’m sorry, I just…um…I…” he swallows and his eyebrows dip down a little with his own thoughts, until finally he braces himself and finishes the sentence. “…want you,” (what women doesn't want to hear that from Jim Halpert)
Maybe they’re both in sync or maybe he’s kissing his blood into her because she feels like she can taste the person that he is, she can taste him more than just his mouth and it makes her dip her tongue a little further into him.
Please update soon with the smut. I don't think I can wait long.
Date: April 10, 2008 05:28 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
Dead. I'm dead and Stablergirl killed me and now I won't get to see Dinner Party. ;o(
Date: April 10, 2008 05:26 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
That was really hot!
Date: April 10, 2008 05:02 pm Title: Some people say I look like Bette Davis.
well...that was....
ahem.
HOLYFUCKYOUBROKEMYBRAIN.
and just in time for dinner part ;)
10 [Report This]Date: April 08, 2008 04:47 pm Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.
This is a true story - I have been on a farm in OK visiting my Grandpa the past 4 days. The one day we drove into "town" I went to the public library, so there was a new chap, let out a little whoop and printed it, but didn't have time to review - this is what you have done to me!!
Anyway...I love this line: "He’s gotten all But soft what light through yonder window breaks about this Pam situation and it’s embarrassing."
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 09:31 pm Title: Did I ever tell you the one about that girl in the bar?
Stablergirl! Dear God...this story has just about flattened me. I've actually read the next chapter (which is also brilliant) but on re-reading this one I noticed something that I just had to comment on...
I love that this chapter from Jim's point of view has him seeing that one look on Pam's face and how he just wants to capture it...What I really love is that you're pointing back to the chapter with the kiss on camera when Pam is just staring at the expression on Jim's voice and she says that she wants to burn into her memory. So fantastic. That connection is what makes this story(not to mention your ridiculous skills ;) ) They're both looking into the other and seeing something that they've never had before...something that they want to see all of the time...that they want to make sure never vanishes. I just...GUH. I just had to get that out because to me it's just a beautiful and masterful way of telling their story...making this connection so meaningful. I can't wait to read more :)
Date: April 06, 2008 07:50 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.
“Wake up, Pam,” he whispers, “this is real,”
After that kiss? I got all shivery.
Love how she won't let him go back inside and how they stand there holding each other at the end. Can't wait for more!
Date: April 06, 2008 01:45 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.
Yet another brilliant chapter. Not to mention hot. ;)
I love how you describe the intensity of this relationship and how they both stuggle to deal with it on different levels. Pam, a very rational being, is suddenly faced with something that's completely out of her control whereas Jim, who's usually very irrational, for once feels something that makes sense to him.
Also, very nice use of intertextual references.
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 12:06 am Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.
You should write professionally. All of your stories are so incredible - and different from each other. You clearly have a real gift for this.
I just love this description of Jim's feelings. I love the frantic & tense quality of it:
He feels defeated and he feels like he wants to grab her and kiss her and get inside of her life. He wants to confess things to her and like get all up in her space and her house and like leave his sweatshirts in her closet and stuff. He wants in. He wants in her life and in her place and in her head and in her body and whatever else he can get in that she owns, he wants in.
Date: April 05, 2008 08:14 pm Title: I didn't want to be part of your problem, but I am.
This chapter absolutely sparkled! The scene with them outside...I don't even know how to describe how awesome it was. I can almost taste the desperation bubbling up out of Jim, and Pam's confusion is so very real. LOVE IT.