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Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2008 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved your take on the break-up, especially this line:

"Not that you would have let him, but the offer might have helped you feel dumped, rather than just let go."  

PS Sorry to be late in reading/reviewing. I'm going back through things I haven't read, starting with the "A's"...

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06, 2008 05:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Great job on this!  I loved the fact that she notices that the cameras don't follow her when she's not with Jim, and that his "I'm done" has many different layers to it.  I hope you will write some more fic for us, because you really have a knack for it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I struggled a little with the "I'm done". I originally made it "I'm done, I can't" but I'm glad I went with it the way I did. Thanks so much for reviewing, and for your kind words of encouragement! I have three unfinished stories so I'm thinking I'll try to wind them up! Thanks!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 05:01 am Title: Chapter 1

'I'm done.' Wow. Sometimes two words convey more about a character than two chapters. Loved Karen thinking she's tertiary even to the cameras, the sunglasses, that final image of her smoking with the kids (wishing the fountain worked - what a great metaphor.) All feels very right for the character - and just beautiful, evocative, succinct writing.

Author's Response: Thank you so much Colette! You have been one of my favorite writers in this fandom so I really really appreciate hearing your thoughts. I was so worried about posting this, because it has been so long since I wrote. But I'm glad I did. It felt good to flex my creative muscles! I was in the park last time I was home, sitting facing the fountain and was struck by how it would feel to get dumped next to such a beautiful but perpetually broken thing. Anyway, thanks for the detailed review!

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05, 2008 04:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Gorgeous writing, really well done. 

Author's Response: Thanks Sweetpea!! I was so nervous posting this so I realy appreciate that you took the time to review. Thanks again!

Reviewer: Wendy Blue Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 10:08 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow. That was really beautiful, and I loved how it's written in...first person?  I think that's it ;) Anyway, this was lovely.  Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks Wendy Blue!! It is second person perspective, although I had to wikipedia it to make sure... ;) I was so glad to write it down as its been on my mind for awhile! Thanks for the review, it is always muchly appreciated!

Reviewer: Shassafrass Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 04, 2008 09:19 am Title: Chapter 1

Perfect. Smart. Perfect.

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much Shassafrass!! I really appreciate it.

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