Date: February 01, 2010 09:44 am Title: It's not over till you both get your cookies
Umm...HELL YEAH!! That was a very, very good chapter. You combined two of my favorite JAM moments and weaved into your story so effortlessly. LOVE it!! My stomach went flippity-floppity at the image you painted of the two of them, just kissing, in Pam's tiny kitchen. So intimate, so sweet and definitely sexy.
Now, I better get some JAM smut or else.....I'll keep reading until I get some (TWSS!). But don't keep me (and Jim and Pam) hanging!
Author's Response: Stay tuned...
Date: February 01, 2010 09:40 am Title: Butterflies
Awww...Jim and Pam's first kiss. They're all grown up now! I absolutely love the way Jim was so nervous about asking his best friend out. And their conversation was so sweet and awkward and real. Like so many of us went through around that age. Brings back some good memories. *happy sigh*
Also, the way Jim was in the previous chapter was so funny. Of course most teenage boys are obsessed with boobs and I guess Jimmy was no exception. The last line was priceless!
Author's Response: Ha, I wish my first kiss had been as sweet and adorable as Jim and Pam. It was more akin to "Wow, someone's getting decapitated on screen, holy crap what's that in my mouth, ah, slimy, oh my god, I'm choking."
And yes, no matter how precious and good little Jim Halpert is, boys and boobs...
10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2010 08:56 am Title: It's not over till you both get your cookies
YES!! I smiled the whole way through! This was great! Your incorporation of Booze Cruise and Casino Night really hit it's mark here, and did not feel forced or out of place. Wonderfully written tension and awkwardness, perfect banter and just adorable. I love what you've done here in this story, and especially in this chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love those two moments, and there's a great interview with John and Jenna where she said the thought in her head was "if you kiss me right now, i'm not going to stop you" so I thought that would work for Pam.
Date: February 01, 2010 04:12 am Title: It's not over till you both get your cookies
Yes! A thousand times yes! I think this definitely constitutes as a long awaited kiss! Nice build up of tension there. I was literally chanting in my head "kiss her kiss her kiss her". (Okay, maybe out loud too). Can't wait for more but I have a horrible feeling it's not going to be the straight forward happy ending I might want...not that I mind if it isn't, I'm sure it will still be good :)
Author's Response: Spoiler alert: Pam becomes a lesbian and Jim wants to be with her so badly, he gets a sex change.
;-)
Date: January 31, 2010 10:14 am Title: Go west, young man?
I KNEW there was only one choice for Jim and that was the right one to stay w/ Pam. This chapter, to me, feels like a significant shift in their relationship. No matter how much Jim thinks he 'loves' Karen, it's not really close to what he feels for Pam (the way you wrote them in this story). And I love how even Karen knows this based on the ultimatum she gave Jim.
I'm going to echo the sentiments of other reviewers and beg you to please let these two get together without anymore roadblocks. I felt like I just finished watching season 3 of TO. It's exhausting and I'm excited to read what's ahead (hopefully some JAM smut *nudge, nudge, wink, wink*)
Author's Response: Pervert. ;-)
Hey, you're among friends.
Thanks for reading! I appreciate the reviews and hope you'll continue sharing your thoughts.
Date: January 31, 2010 10:10 am Title: Salt
I am so glad that you continued this story because it's such a fascinating glimpse in the childhood of two of our favorite TV characters. And you're so great at giving them personalities that aren't too far from what I would think Jim and Pam were like at those ages. Does that make sense?
My favorite parts of this chapter: the salt in the lemonade (poor Joan & Larissa!) and the double dare (so funny!).
Great job!
Date: January 28, 2010 07:58 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Thank goodness! I'm so glad he isn't going to San Fran. And I don't know why they don't just SEE that they're in love with each other. Hopefully NYC will bring that out finally!
Author's Response: Well, New York can be a very romantic town... or it can make you want to punch people in the face (I grew up there).
Date: January 28, 2010 06:50 pm Title: Go west, young man?
=] yay!
Date: January 28, 2010 04:07 pm Title: Smelden and the Muffin
I love your story, but I have one complaint with it. I wish you would update more! haha! It makes my day one billion times better when I click on the 'most recent' tab and see a new 'In My Life, I Love You More.' They're absolutely wonderful!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I usually wait to write the next chapter until I've gotten a decent number of reviews, because I've made some tweaks based on feedback. For example, this last chapter originally (intentionally) a lot more ambiguous about whether Jim decided to go with Karen to California (in fact, it was going to end with him not having made a decision), but people seemed to really want her out of the picture, so I let him decide that he needed to stay, even though he knew he'd lose Karen and it would hurt. So basically, the faster I get reviews, the faster I update. But honestly, not in the annoying "I won't update until I get 10 reviews per chapter" thing. Of course, there are some things that I have pretty set in stone but there have been a lot of minor tweaks based on feedback. Thanks so much for reading and I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Date: January 28, 2010 03:28 pm Title: Go west, young man?
You did GREAT with this version! I didn't get to see the prior one but I really like this one. Loved the Dunder Muppets and that Pam is taking care of Jim in your version. Liked the internal thoughts. Looking forward to New York!
Author's Response: Thanks! The previous chapter got lost in the hardware breakdown but it's back up now and I'd love to know what you think of it.
Date: January 28, 2010 06:23 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
the story got lost with this chapter, too. :o(
Author's Response: Okay, it's back up, along with the one before that! Three of my chapters got lost, but they're all reposted now. I'd love your perspectives.
Date: January 28, 2010 01:57 am Title: Go west, young man?
I think you definitely did ok with this one! Having said that, I can't wait until these two kids realise that they lurrvve each other and we get to the fun stuff :D I'll keep avidly checking for updates :)
Author's Response: Yeah, they're a little dumb, aren't they?
Date: January 27, 2010 09:14 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Where the story? I don't see it hhmmmn weird
Author's Response: I don't know what happened, but it's back up. Hope to hear your thoughts on this chapter!
Date: January 26, 2010 07:28 am Title: Go west, young man?
You made me cry! He's going to California! You're killing me! :( LOL Such a great chapter, I don't like to cry but seriously this was really good.
Author's Response: You're the second person to say Jim's going! I must have really messed up because I thought it was so clear that even though it's a tough decision and there's no win win win here, he decided that going to California wasn't right for him. So I went back and put in a few changes that will hopefully clarify things. I wouldn't have known it was confusing without the reviews, so thanks!
Date: January 26, 2010 12:17 am Title: Go west, young man?
I usually don't like AUs that are so...AU! And yet, I'm not sure why, maybe because you're characterization is right on the money and the development is perfect but I'm hooked on this. I love it. I can't wait to see where it goes. And it may even convince me to read other AUs. So yay!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I know people often have mixed feelings on AU's but I'm trying to make it as believable to Jim and Pam as I can, so I really appreciate the compliment.
Date: January 25, 2010 08:34 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Aww, that was sweet, yet I'm confused. Did Jim go with Karen? I think he did, yet I'm not sure and I don't really want to believe it. GET JIM AND PAM TOGETHER, PRETTY PLEASE WITH A CHERRY ON TOP! Thank you, andtheivy... in advance...
Author's Response: Did I screw up somewhere? I thought it was clear that Jim decided he was not going to go with Karen. Yes, it would hurt to lose her, but...
“…but,” continued Jim, “I can’t go. I just…I can’t.”
It was too far. Not just too far from Scranton, but too far from…home.
Home, in this case, mostly meaning Pam.
And Pam waits to tell him about her job in NY because she doesn't want him to make his decision to go there because he feels like he has to look out for her. So she tells him after he's decided that he's not going to go to California. As she says to him, the decision had to be about him.
Jim struggles here, for sure. There's no win win win situation. But no, he is not going to California.
The one chapter I make no attempt to cryptically cliffhanger and it still comes across as mysterious....
Date: January 24, 2010 05:54 pm Title: Jimmy Pammy Boat
Went back to read this because it's just so cute, the image of Jim and Pam as toddlers, playing together. You did a wonderful job writing the way baby Jim and baby Pam interacted. There's the way babies tend to hoard all the toys and not share, the way if one cries, the other tends to do the same. I was smiling the whole time I read this.
So good! And the last two sentences gives me hope that this story will end the way I want it to.
Date: January 24, 2010 05:11 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
love this...and pam's reaction omg so funny. =]
Author's Response: Thanks! My favorite line to write was Jim's "you were surprised that I have a penis?" I was totally picturing the look with the cocked head (no pun) and slight squint, like "really? really?"
Date: January 23, 2010 07:38 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Sh*t, so close. I'm not at all surprised that tension between them exploded, even if nothing happened (and please god why not???). Ugh I really hope they get together, the waiting is killing me.
Author's Response: That's coming. And when it does, it is going to kick your ass. So...stay sharp.
Actually, I have no idea whether any asses, or other body parts, are going to be kicked. I just wanted to say that. And in lieu of actually meaning "stay sharp," I'll say "please keep reading and reviewing."
I hope I can leave you smiling and satisfied.
Date: January 21, 2010 06:00 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
you. are. a. TEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
and i love it. *sexy eyes*
Author's Response: So I've been told. *Flutter* Though at times there's been another word that prefaces the word "tease" and it's generally not meant as a compliment.
For the record, I don't believe I am one.
Date: January 21, 2010 12:32 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Nooooooooo!! Pam!!! Why did you run away?? Go back and finish what you started!!
*shakes fist at antheivy* See what you've made me do? Yelling at a fictional character in a fictional story. *sigh*
Another great chapter. I am very much enjoying the way you're writing Jim and Pam's relationship. The way they're navigating through this best-friends-but-feels-like-more thing. And it's becoming apparent their attraction to each other. Also, please get rid of Toby and Karen stat! Stat means now. Do it! 5-4-3-2...
Although this chapter didn't leave me smilin' & satisfy (I blame Pam!), I will keep coming back for more.
Author's Response: Yeah, she didn't really leave Jim smiling and satisfied either. He had to take matters into his own hands.
Date: January 21, 2010 11:26 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
OMG!! The 'incident' part was just ... OMG! This is a great chapter! I really heard the jealousy in Pam's voice when she spoke about Jim loving Karen. You've captured their characters so perfectly here, it's such a great read! And ick, Toby. Good stuff, can't wait for more!
Date: January 21, 2010 10:55 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Lol, lol. I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this!
That was funny, um... interesting... and did I mention hilarious??? I LOVED that last bit on the roof, "it's... it's... BIG!" I seriously almost dropped my computer, that was hilarious!
Okay, really, I promise I'm not that sick, but that was just hilarious.
Can't wait for the next chapter, and go away Karen and Toby! and Meredith, too. YUCK YUCK YUCK!
Author's Response: Oh no, I like good JAMporn too. No shame in it.
Date: January 17, 2010 07:12 pm Title: Smelden and the Muffin
When you update, I get a warm, fuzzy feeling. haha Not joking. These are fabulous. The first few were okay, but these last ones (teen years and up) are making me laugh, and aw at how cute they are.You should update more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I admit I have a tendency to not update until I get a fair number of reviews, because I keep hoping to see how people are liking it. There have been some outline adjustments based on reader wishes. Nothing too major, but some little tweaks here and there. Hope to hear from you again. Thanks for reading!
Date: January 17, 2010 01:05 pm Title: Brownie Mix and Bathtubs
ha. i used to do the "shaving" thing with my dad! and i'm a girl.... and i loved the whole "why does jimmy have funny stuff?" part. ohhh the innocence of kids.