9 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2009 09:49 am Title: I mean, it's not really a date if the girl goes home to her fiancee. Right?
What a great concept for a series of stories! I always enjoy the tension of their unspoken but obvious attraction for one another. I especially like how you wrote this part: Each morning he looks forward to seeing her, but everyday it’s becoming a little bit harder to hold back and bite his tongue. He laughs with her and makes jokes that layer over the things he really wants to tell her and quite frankly it’s becoming exhausting. His palms are sweaty as he steps out of the elevator and makes his way into the office.
It seems to me that early S2 Jim sees Pam as is work girlfriend. He sort of has convinced himself of this, and then there are moments where he is shaken back to reality, like the fight you covered. I find his thought process dealing with this realization very interesting and heart breaking. Please keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks WhatAWaste!! Yeah, I think sometimes Jim got away from himself and then was hurt even more when he was reminded of what he couldn't do. It were those moments that I found so heartbreaking for him. I'm glad you enjoy the concept - you know, it's hard to think of something that hasn't already been done by now, lol.
8 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2009 02:46 pm Title: I mean, it's not really a date if the girl goes home to her fiancee. Right?
I like this idea, kells. You've got a lot to work with here, especially if you're going to follow it all the way up to the present.
I liked these lines a lot:
He comes back to himself when she reminds him of where he stands in her life, what he represents.
And this:
The words are sharp and precise and it cuts him in just the right way, because he wasn’t joking about it being a date. It was the best date he’d been on in years. But he steels himself and manages an air of indifference before pressing on, “No, it’s cool. I just don’t want things to be weird or whatever, and I shouldn’t have said something so….careless.”
That last word drops off of his tongue, heavy and loaded and he knows he’s hit his mark when her head snaps up and their eyes meet for a brief second. She looks almost guilty and he knows that even though she may not mean to, she can be hurtful too. She knows that her words hurt him in the same way that his do her, and he’s not sure if he feels relief or frustration at this revelation. Maybe a little of both.
I like your use of the word "careless" there and their mutual acknowledgement that they hurt each other with words.
Looking forward to the next installment!
Author's Response: Thank you Callisto! Yeah, all the times we saw Jim and Pam disagree - outright anyway - we never saw the making up part of it - a new episode would come and they wouldn't have skipped a beat (well, save for S3). I thought it would be fun to explore what could happen that the cameras didn't catch :) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2009 02:30 pm Title: I mean, it's not really a date if the girl goes home to her fiancee. Right?
oh, this sounds good so far (:
Author's Response: Why thank you :)
8 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2009 02:05 pm Title: I mean, it's not really a date if the girl goes home to her fiancee. Right?
I like this, kells. I was thinking of Jim's stairwell talk with Dwight from Money when up pops this: So, what – does it involve manure? Or beets? You have to tell me. Poor guy--emotions so close to the surface and he's can't properly express them. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks, Nan. Yeah, the stairwell talk is so nice because it lets you get a better insight as to what Jim was going through that whole time. Heartbreaking. I'm glad your enjoying this, thank you, as always!
Date: January 25, 2009 01:51 pm Title: I mean, it's not really a date if the girl goes home to her fiancee. Right?
Very nice. I like how you added that they both hurt each other with words. It's not a one sided thing. Can't wait for the next one.
Author's Response: Yeah, I know Pam takes the flack a lot of the time, but I think they both made mistakes many times. Thanks for reading and reviewing, kh!!