Date: July 11, 2009 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 15
I'm glad you're updating this fast, because I'm on the edge of my seat here.
God bless Frieda.
Very nice job building the tension.
Author's Response:
Yeah...I like her, too! And I'm so happy that it's keeping your interest.
Date: July 11, 2009 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 10
I'm loving all of this, but I especially liked this paragraph. It seems right out of Jim Halpert's head:
Jim’s thoughts raced back to Scranton…and Karen. He still hadn’t called to let her know that they…that he was alright. He hadn’t called. It chilled him to realize just how distant she was in his mind. But the damn thing was, what bothered him the most was the fact he just didn’t feel compelled to turn to Pam and ask her to excuse him for even a few minutes so that he could call his Karen to tell her he was safe and dry and warm in some quaint old motel with his used to be best friend that he still had ‘feelings’ for and how terribly lucky they were to have found the place and how terribly lucky they were to be able to share the last available room and how even more terribly he missed his awesome girlfriend and how he hoped they could get plowed out as soon as possible so he could rush back to Scranton…and to her. It just wasn’t at the top of his list.
Author's Response: Whoa...I'm almost out of breath just reading that, again! Glad you liked it.
Date: July 11, 2009 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 15
Another great set of chapters. This story flows so nicely and I love how each chapter takes another brick down in the wall between Jim and Pam. It also captures the awkwardness of S3 so very well.
I can't wait to squeal again when I see another update on my e-mail!
Author's Response: Soon...soon!
Date: July 11, 2009 11:20 am Title: Chapter 12
=] can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thanks for reading. I'll be posting the next chapers soon.
6 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2009 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 12
Last three chapters were great. I really liked the fact that Rachel picks up immediately on the fact that Pam has feelings for Jim, and they can't even see it themselves. Sometimes I have just wanted to slap these two! I can't wait to see whats next!
Author's Response: Well, you know what they say....sometimes you just can't see the forest for the trees...or something like that. And yes, I know exactly what you mean about having wanted to give each one of them a bit of a smack, hoping they'd finally wake up...that was pretty much all of season 3, right? Who knows, maybe they'll each get somehing of a smack down before this story ends.
Date: July 10, 2009 06:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Another fabulous three pack of chapters! I agree with what's been said by other reviewers: your inner monologue is very true to character and full of juicy details.
I wonder if Pam will have a "Beach Games" moment and lay it on the line for Jim? ;-)
Author's Response:
Thanks Bees for the kind words...I really do appreciate them. And I really did try to keep Jim's and Pam's "voices" in mind as I thought about choosing certain ways to express what they were saying and thinking. Now, there are some words I've given them to utter that I know we haven't actually heard either of them say (it is after all network TV ) but I'm sure we can agree with some level of certainty that it is fairly likely that such words have in fact escaped their mouths (if even accidently) on occasion. As far as a "Beach Games" moment...you'll just have to keep reading.
Date: July 10, 2009 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 12
Things are heated up (if only in their minds). I love the details to their thoughts. Thank you so much for having so many updates ready. I anxiously await each dat.
Author's Response: Well, hasn't someone described the brain as the largest sex organ? And with these two, we've always seen the wheels sort of turning inside their heads whenever it came to what the hell was going on between the two of them. I'm glad you are eagerly anticipating my installments. I purposely waited to post until I had the story completed just to guard against running into any extended periods of writer's "block" and then leaving people hanging. I just wasn't comfortable with that prospect. And, to be honest when I posted these last three chapters I thought they wouldn't actually show up until tomorrow (Saturday) morning. Anyway, I'm just glad you continue to enjoy where this is going.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2009 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 12
I must say, you've got a gift when it comes to building up tension! This is great. I love how much inner monologue you're giving us- can completely grasp where they're coming from. And your characterization is excellent. Looking foward to your next update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. For me, a lot of what's been so intriguing about Jim's and Pam's story has been trying to understand what's been going on inside their heads. And a lot of the fun of following their story is that each one of us gets to fill in the blanks within the context of our own accumulated life experiences. I'm happy that the way I'm telling this part of their story seems to have made a positive impression and kept your interest.
Date: July 10, 2009 03:09 pm Title: Chapter 6
as dwight would say, this story is so sexy it's hostile! LOL
Author's Response: Dwight just might describe Pam this way: "Creamy skin. Straight teeth. Curly hair. Amazing breasts." Is that hostile? Anyway, please keep reading and I'm glad it's "piqued" your interest!
Date: July 10, 2009 01:59 pm Title: Chapter 9
oh my god! the suspense is killing me! keep going this is so good!
Author's Response: Wow! Now take a deep breath and repaeat after me...it's only a story...it's only a story. But really, so many thanks...it's great to see this level of enthusiasm. I really do appreciate it.
Date: July 10, 2009 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 9
oh la la! niiiiiiiiiiiiicccccccccccccceeeeeee
Date: July 10, 2009 11:47 am Title: Chapter 9
Pam's pulling out the big guns! Three more chaps tomorrow, right? Can't wait!
Author's Response: You're like...insatiable! We'll see!
Date: July 10, 2009 11:39 am Title: Chapter 8
Definitely more and more fun. That's right, Pam, be a good samaritan :)
Author's Response: Pam is very....altruistic! Yeah, that's the ticket!
Date: July 10, 2009 11:31 am Title: Chapter 7
Totally sucked in, Bil. This is getting more and more fun.
Author's Response:
Geeesh...thought I read that wrong for a minute...it's been a long week! Well, there's lot's more to come...so pace yourself.
6 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2009 08:30 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, man. I am completely addicted to this story and I haven't been this excited to read an update in a while! I was so happy when I got up this morning and saw three more chapters.
I can't wait to see where this goes-and I love them getting stranded in the hotel in the snow. Awesome!
Author's Response: Gee...I'm getting goosebumps. Do we need an intervention...I know a guy in Scranton who's had some experience. So happy you're enjoying this.
Date: July 10, 2009 07:46 am Title: Chapter 9
It's so amazing that you post this story in a few chapters at a time! You have created the perfect scenario here and I am hanging on your every word!
Author's Response: Yeah...I'm just a big tease! But, hey...I figure it's sort of a pretty good stretch of time 'til September 17th, so why not! And besides, these two still have a long way to go! So please, stick with it.
Date: July 09, 2009 11:25 am Title: Chapter 6
What a treat to read six chaps over lunch, Mr Bill! I'm really enjoying this and looking forward to more tension and saucy flirtation ; )
Author's Response: So glad it helped you enjoy your lunch. And please, stick with it. Things just might get more tense...and even more heated between these two than mere "saucy flirtation"!
Date: July 09, 2009 01:20 am Title: Chapter 6
Yay to Jim's and Pam's sexy banter. I really like the fact that they're talking and behaving more like themselves now that they're out of the office.
Can't wait to see where this is going next. Hopefully to a roadside motel somewhere because of all the snow? *nudge nudge wink wink*
Author's Response: bkwrm...I think you're on to me!
Date: July 09, 2009 12:48 am Title: Chapter 6
ooh, steamy on the interstate. wow that sounded like something michael gary scott would say... terribly sorry!
anyway, this story is brilliant, and i love how you're slowly playing it out. it could be almost 20 chapters by the time the 2 days are over. and i have absolutely NO PROBLEM WITH THAT. you know why, because this story is great, no faults, whatsoever.
besides the obvious fact that jim and pam aren't together, yet, but i can feel it coming. with all the 'saucy flirtation' (very clever, i must say)and 'overt sexiness'??? whew, it'll make an appearance, i'm sure.
i can't wait to see what happens next, and it's too bad i've run out of chapters to read. guess you just have to write more. probably a good thing, because it's 12:46 at night. now 12:47 really early in the morning. you choose.
great job, and that was a really weird review, i know. (by the way, even though i've realized i'm making really british sounding comments, like spot on or brilliant, i'm from seattle. just wanted to say that.... not that it matters.)
Author's Response: I'm so pleased that you are enjoying my story. It still has a long way to go...so be patient. And, get some sleep. You know what someone (wink, wink) said, "When you get eight hours, compared to like six hours, like, big difference. Gotta get your REM cycle going, with the whole sleeping. Better than not!"
Date: July 09, 2009 12:36 am Title: Chapter 5
YYYYEEEEEESSSSSSSS! i love you pam! 'don't you dare!' is my new motto! i hope that gets some more inner emotions conversations started. (sorry, i didn't put that very well) you get what i mean... start some serious heart to heart, that's what i meant.
anyway, i have faith in you. great job!
Date: July 09, 2009 12:31 am Title: Chapter 4
that was great! sorry, that's all i have time for, i'm reading this great story called why albany in february is like paris in april. have you ever heard of it, it's really good. also, that author is great, too. and, lucky me, there's two chapters ahead of me!
*wink* *wink* :)
Date: July 09, 2009 12:23 am Title: Chapter 3
no time to review, must keep reading...
Date: July 09, 2009 12:19 am Title: Chapter 2
why were they being so awful to each other. i KNOW deep down they wish they could just say how they really felt, but why oh why would they choose to be so awful, instead of any other emotion??
anyway, still a great chapter - and i hope the car ride is eventful...
Date: July 08, 2009 11:45 pm Title: Chapter 4
I think Jim looks nice in a suit too. But I also like casual Jim. Hopefully they get some things of their chest on this car ride. Great job so far.
Author's Response: Thanks again.
9 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2009 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
i'm getting antsy but i'm sure it will be worth the wait. :) i'm excited to see what happens next! snowstorms always open metaphorical doors!
Author's Response:
Stay tuned! New chapters are coming soon.