Date: June 09, 2007 07:28 am Title: Chapter 3
"Because it's scary."
I think this sums up season three Pam interaction with Jim.
And in general, this chapter really I think captures the confliction that they had post Casino Night... I mean, its all been said before, but, it does work, and it really just, its true. Jim is angry, and Pam is comfortable, and its conflict. And then the line like Pam's smiles are only for Jim. Greatness. Really, if those two could read each others thoughts... well, life would have been easier.
And its like, so wonderful how caring Jim is. Like, how he can make Pam see that it is Roy that has the warped self image of her, and not her. Just needing someone to say stuff like that is really all you need sometimes. I mean, I remember one time my friend said I had nice teeth, and I was like, really, my teeth? But, it totally made my day, and years later, I still think of it. And, so yeah, the fact that Jim does it constantly. And its not so much that he is like Pam could like him (because then it would just be the opposite sorta thing), but its more like, Pam deserves to know how great she is because everyone does, and something like that.
And that entire scene with Jim just telling Pam to admit it was great, and, Pam you can and will! You will call it off!
Author's Response: Exactly my point here. So glad it came across.
Date: April 29, 2007 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 3
God, I wish Jim had done this on the show. I wish he'd insisted Pam be honest with him--and with herself. But I guess I'll just have to be patient...and read fic whenever my patience wanes. :)
On a nitpicky, technical note, you might want to pay a bit more attention to your punctuation around dialogue. When you're attributing dialogue, you don't need a new sentence with a capital letter.
Like, for instance, here: "You really don't know do you?" He says softly.
That should be like this: "You really don't know do you?" he says softly.
Because "he says softly" isn't a sentence on its own. It's there to explain what's in the quotes.
Well, anyway, you probably know all of that, but your stories are so good that I want them to read as smoothly as possible. :)
Author's Response:
You know what? This was written back in the day when I was writing only for me. So this story (and anything before it) was completely unbeta'd.
Truthfully - I did not even notice I was doing that. I am so very glad you brought it up - because just as you want them to read smoothly - I want my stories to be written smoothly and I've certainly been remiss in that particular regard.
So thank you SO MUCH!