Date: May 01, 2011 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 5
Yikes, talk about tension! I really liked how you showed that Pam wanted the two men who were most important to her to become friends, even though she should have known better. I can imagine her wanting that before she realised what was actually happening between her and Jim. I also liked how they forgot all about the match because they were just talking and hanging out before Roy finally arrived. My favourite part of the chapter might be the penguin story, though. Good catch!
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2011 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 5
This was such a great chapter! Totally highlights her struggle in the early days. I really felt for her at the end when Jim left and she was lonely and missing him. But the part I liked best was the way you worked in the penguin, how he still had it until cece played with it in the mud. I know it's not a big thing but it just flows in there perfectly. I'm not sure I'm explaining myself right but it just worked for me. Looking forward to more!
Date: April 30, 2011 07:21 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hey, SO! Here you are, once again, keeping me company on a Saturday night :D You've been busy! This must surely be the longest piece you've written. You weren't kidding when you said this would be epic, and to that I say yyaaaaay! I was so pissed at Roy through this chap. Such a thoughtless douche :( he ruined a perfectly lovely time.
Greedily awaiting more!