Date: July 05, 2018 07:34 pm Title: First Day
This was another great chapter! Jim's need to be busy rang really true and I loved his trying to make friends in an almost hostile office with minimal results. You're too good for them, Jim.
Back off, Karen. Back off now.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And yeah, Karen, if we could just make her go away thatíd be great. Ugh. But conflict makes for a good story and a happy ending, so she has to stay around for a while. Unfortunately.
Date: July 04, 2018 08:35 pm Title: First Day
I loved the little nuances about Hannah and Tony. Seems appropriate. We never got a taste of what Jim’s first day was, and I think you hit the internals right on the head!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I feel bad that I left Martin out, haha. I appreciate your reading and reviewing!
Date: July 04, 2018 07:34 pm Title: First Day
A very good look into Jim's head, especially in the time between seasons 2 & 3. I think you captured his feeling of stir craziness very well here. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think stir crazy is a good way to describe how he must have felt. Iím glad it was conveyed well! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: June 19, 2018 06:47 am Title: Birthday
Oh, yay for Penny! I love the sister dynamic here. Pam’s waterfall of emotions from sad to angry to inspired seems completely in character and makes total sense. Who hasn’t had an epiphany in the middle of a dance floor, right? ;)
And yeah. Still wanting to hug Jim. I can’t wait to read more!
Author's Response: Right? All my life altering realizations have happened while out on the dance floor. Well maybe not all, but at least one or two. Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Date: May 28, 2018 12:56 pm Title: Parking Lot
Holy... what a beautiful and heartbreaking chapter! You write both characters so well but I especially love your insight into Jim.
Can we all just hug crying Jim?
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I would absolutely LOVE to hug crying Jimówouldnít we all? If only.
Date: May 28, 2018 10:05 am Title: Parking Lot
You hit the nail on the head with this one. Wow. You’re writing these so beautifully. I can wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Iím glad youíve enjoyed them all and I so appreciate all the reviews.
Date: May 28, 2018 08:50 am Title: That's What She Said
My intention to read this all the way through and then comment at the end is failing miserably because I keep finding the need to stop at the end of every chapter all of a sudden. I LOVE the way you write the inner monologues. The way that Jim calls Katy in desperation and then feels guilty is so spot on. And I can only imagine that Pam pulled one of those “Make myself feel better about Jim having a girlfriend so I go find Roy” type of deals at the end. Ugh. So good!!
Date: May 27, 2018 03:38 pm Title: Prank
Stopping again because the way you talked about Pam’s heart made MY heart melt. Ugh. I love that stuff. Moving on to the next one!
Author's Response: Keep Ďem comin, sister! I am a review whore so feel free to leave one for every chapter if you like. 😉
Date: May 27, 2018 08:05 am Title: Parking Lot
Melting. So well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It might be my favorite chapter that Iíve written so far.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It might be my favorite chapter that Iíve written so far.
Date: May 27, 2018 07:24 am Title: Message
Okay, I have no idea how I started this and then let it get away from me, but I’m catching up and just had to comment on this chapter (because you know how I love a good IM story) and say that you nailed it (are nailing it)!! The IM was spot on in character, and aside from that, the way you have this set up in this little internal dialogue way of writing is just fantastic (that’s for the story as a whole. I’m blabbering. ANYWAY). I can’t wait to finish the rest! Keep up the amazing job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love a good IM story, too, theyíre my favorite. Iím so glad youíre enjoying it!
Date: May 25, 2018 09:35 pm Title: Parking Lot
Wow! You capture exactly what was happening and it is . . . wow! This is a great glimpse into Pam's mind and heart and Jim's as well. It's so heavy, and yet not melodramatic. And the way it plays out makes sense. Pam's train of thought follows a logical path, particularly that of "I can't". Beautifully written BT!
Author's Response: Thank you, Clover! That means so much. Iím so glad you enjoyed it!
Date: May 12, 2018 11:07 pm Title: Bears
Aww, I love this take on Bears. I kinda of want a 14a and 14b on Beets and Battlestar Galactica, but that's just because you're doing this whole series so well.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I struggled a lot with trying to figure out how to incorporate all three without it being too heavy handed and while keeping it in the right time frame. I actually have a draft of it, but it felt too silly considering that the next installment is Casino Night. So it got retooled into ďBearsĒ alone, and Iím really happy with how it turned out, and Iím glad you are too! :)
Date: April 12, 2018 10:49 am Title: Lunch
I’m finally caught up and I’m loving this!
The way you had Katy brought back after Jim claimed he hadn’t seen her for a while in email surveillance is my new head canon.
(Also really enjoying all the Kelly interactions)
Author's Response: Thank you! Part of what has made this so fun for me is that I can incorporate my own head canons, so Iím glad theyíre becoming someone elseís, too! And Kelly is probably the most fun for me to write because I relate to her on a spiritual level...in that I donít know when to shut up. 😂
Date: April 09, 2018 06:36 pm Title: Lunch
I really like the work you do on Pam's internal monologue. I'd love to know the Jim version of this (not that I think you need to write a whole chapter on it, just that the Pam version made me want more).
Author's Response: Thank you! That's a high compliment. Jim's perspective is definitely coming soon!
Date: March 12, 2018 09:48 pm Title: Prank
“There's no kitten around on Halloween."
This exchange actually had me laughing longer than it probably should have but I could just so easily picture her “uh-huh, you see what I did there expression” and then him all “you are completely ridiculous but so freaking adorable”
And this... “Pam is torn between wanting her (best) friend to be happy and successful and wanting him to stay here. With her.”
So true, she (always) wanted what was best for him and I really don’t think jim saw it like that. He just understood it as another sign that she didn’t feel the same way for him as he did for her.
“Fixing” things in the bar, without proper discussion, by making plans to prank Dwight feels very right.
Author's Response: e ďyoure completely ridiculous but so freaking adorableĒ is exactly the look I had pictured in my head! I just got the season DVDs and have been binging and Iím so sad we didnít get to see more of Pamís awesome pun game in the show, because theyíre all over the deleted scenes. I couldnít help myself, had to throw some corny puns in there. And yeah, I wanted a resolution without a resolution and Iím glad that came across. These two just donít like to talk, so they?
Date: March 11, 2018 07:03 pm Title: Paper
I love this story so much already. You have a real talent for making them sound close to the actual Jim and Pam which is just lovely. I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope to be able to keep them in character as we get into the *real* angsty parts!
Date: March 11, 2018 10:30 am Title: Message
Your character voice are so realistic, so smooth, and so believable. You’ve taken these tiny moments from the show, something as easily overlooked as Dwight’s anime crush (what a fantastic character), and created this bittersweet moment where his fictional obession meets Jim’s feelings in a way that could seem cliche or silly if written by almost anyone else, but instead feels heartwrenching and encapsulates the emotions surrounding Jim and Pam’s friendship throughout the earlier seasons. I like this a lot.
Author's Response: Thank you! I live for that early season angst, so Iím glad to hear that my intentions are coming through in the writing! I appreciate your compliments so much!
Date: March 10, 2018 09:23 pm Title: Message
So so good! So true to where they both are during that time. I like how you’ve so subtly managed to get from Hot Girl, hit the next few eps, and foreshadow through to The Fire.
Author's Response: Thank you! Iím glad it reads like how I imagine they felt during the early seasons: confused, mostly, haha. I appreciate you reading and reviewing so much!
Date: February 28, 2018 08:26 am Title: Desk
Just the right amount of angst in this one. You filled in this episode perfectly, everything added felt like it belonged. My favorite was the convo at lunch between jim and Roy after Pam left. Of course something was said and of course Roy just doesn’t get it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I donít know why angst is what I gravitate towards; something about that guy stabby heart achey feeling is just the best. Iím glad that you feel like the extra stuff belonged in the episode, thatís something I always worry about! Thank you for reading!
Date: February 22, 2018 07:57 pm Title: Paper
I really enjoy your writing style. It’s so easy to visualize the scene and your characterization is great! Can’t wait to see what you do with the rest of the challenge words :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I always worry if I'm writing them OOC so I'm glad to hear that others don't think that! I look forward to tackling the rest of the challenge!
Date: February 21, 2018 12:01 pm Title: Paper
Great writing here. Very believable dialogues with Pam and Jim. Cool concept you have with them being aware of the doc crew, not many people address that in stories.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad to read that my interactions with them are in character. That is always my biggest worry-are they OOC? So I'm glad to see that at least one person doesn't think so!