Date: August 07, 2018 06:33 pm Title: Mini-Golf
I'm glad that you didn't do all 18 holes (twss), but that you chose to highlight the little moments here between Jim and Pam. Having him double check that she didn't mind the nickname, sharing about their parents, the ice pack--all the makings of a friendship that that they need as that foundation. Don't think I didn't catch that "almost Morgan" in there ;) You're doing a great job with this!
Author's Response: Thanks. They clearly know each other very well by the time the cameras show up so it made sense to show just how that kind of thing builds and why even though Pam, being engaged, is so comfortable with Jim. So lots of fun in that regard. And you stumbled onto my secret, the almost finding out thing. We'll have to play with that some more won't we?
Date: August 06, 2018 08:54 am Title: Mini-Golf
Oh man this was delightful. Good tension, both romantic and dramatic. I'd love to see more of the driving lessons sprinkled around, and I enjoyed your reason why Jim has the golf pencil.
Author's Response: Thanks. We all know that there will be quite of bit of angst coming since I'm keeping this story canon-correct so I wanted at least one angst free chapter before we get to all that. Glad you liked it.
Date: July 24, 2018 07:45 pm Title: The Zone
Oh man, a lot going on in this chapter! So many excellent callbacks to the universe we know and love.
Dwight is a delight. Roy is the worst.
Author's Response: Yeah, there's actually quite a bit of pre-camera backstory to be found within cannon. The picture of Jim and Dwight, stick shift lessons and so on. The trick is to find it and then come up with the story behind it all. It's a lot of fun to create that. Thanks for the feedback.
Date: July 24, 2018 07:32 pm Title: New Beginning
Holy crap, Warrior! I can't even pick a favorite part of the chapter because every single line is great! This is some of the best 'early Jim and Pam' banter I've read in a long time - you really nailed down their personalities and made Jim's first day completely believable.
Author's Response: Thank you. It was entirely my intention that Jim's first day be a good day free of any angst. It was a lot of fun to imagine what went on that day.
Date: July 24, 2018 04:41 pm Title: The Zone
Love your versions of these characters, especially younger Dwight (in addition to JAM, duh). I really like how you keep the story going while giving us ample time inside both their heads.
Author's Response: Thanks. There may be some time jumps coming up soon to better deal with some of the scenes I want to write. These last two chapters were important as Jim and Pam finally "meet" and they of course we have to start in on the pre-camera through season 3 angst that is the JAM relationship. Dwight was kind of fun to write I will admit.
Date: July 15, 2018 09:18 am Title: New Beginning
Ahhhh I loved this!! I’m glad they didn’t immediately recognize each other. That payoff will be spectacular, I think. I really enjoyed Jim ‘s first day and seeing their relationship start to form. You wrote everybody in character so wonderfully. and wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad my characters come across well. It was fun to write how I envisioned Jim's first day went. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: July 12, 2018 09:20 pm Title: New Beginning
Roy remains terrible. The rest of your cast remains excellent. I especially like how you got them out to lunch. Keep going!
Author's Response: Thank you. I had fun writing that lunch "date." As I've said before, don't expect to much out of Roy. I'm glad the rest of the characters came across well.
Date: July 12, 2018 06:42 pm Title: New Beginning
The Cugino’s date was so cute! Oh my goodness. I can’t wait until they figure out that they know each other. It’ll be fun to see how you do it!
Author's Response: Thank you. That part was fun to write. It may be a little before they're in a position to figure that out, which means I have some things to play around with for a while too.
Date: July 05, 2018 08:48 pm Title: A Lot of Reasons
Ahh how do you end it there?! 😭 Looking forward to the next update!
Author's Response: How do I end it there? Simple really, stop typing. I'm kidding of course. It was always my intent to have the chapter end like that. One so I don't have huge chapters that take forever to read and also to have a very clear break from what's coming next. Thanks for the review.
Date: July 05, 2018 07:26 pm Title: A Lot of Reasons
I didn't think it was possible to hate Roy anymore than I already do, but here we are. What a jerk. Although, I'd kind of be interested in seeing some of those counseling sessions.
I was so sad that Pam lost the picture and then so happy that she got it back! And he's right there! Will they recognize each other?! Definitely looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: To me Roy is a guy who peaked in high school. He may be an adult legally, but like many other males, doesn't know how to me a man much less a gentleman. Thus me writing him the way I've been. I was quite proud of myself when I thought up the bookends for this chapter with the picture. Especially the way I've had the chapter end. Lots of evil grins I assure you. As for what's coming, well we'll just have to wait and see but I assure you I'll do my best to write it well.
Date: July 05, 2018 09:10 am Title: A Lot of Reasons
Oh wow, what a whirlwind! What an interesting way to have Roy and Pam end up engaged. It was so perfectly in character for them, as painful as that sounds, but you did that well! Also, that cliff hanger! Ugh! Can’t wait to see their reactions to one another—will they remember right away? Will he see the sketch? Ahh!
Author's Response: Yeah, you probably get the reason behind the chapter title from Pam's speech on the beach. I wanted to explore some of those reasons she said she didn't care about. I do feel a little bad for dumping on Pam for two chapters though. Things will start looking up from here though.
Date: July 03, 2018 01:34 pm Title: A Lot of Reasons
Ahhhh!! I was so sad to read that she’s lost the sketch, then so glad that she’d gotten it back, and *then* so excited to have her looking at it right as the subject came in! Even if she doesn’t know it’s him (or he knows it’s her) and even if there’s still a long way to go, I am loving every second of this. You’ve given them such a great backstory and it feels like it all could have really happened. I literally cannot wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked it so much. I had a huge grin on my face when I thought up the ending to this chapter. It's what kept me driving through all the rest of the stuff I put Pam through. (I'm sorry Pam) There's still a lot of backstory to create too as according to what I've dug up they'd both been at DM for a few years before the show started. So lots of time to play around before we run into canon, kind of. ;)
Date: July 03, 2018 12:02 pm Title: A Lot of Reasons
Oh god, that stuff with Roy was hard to get through (not that you wrote it badly, just that it's hard for me to read that kind of pregnancy scare/proposal thing). But I'm glad Pam has the sketch; I hope she and Jim get along the way they ought. I have full faith in you for how this will go.
Thanks for the vote of confidence. It wasn't the most fun thing I've ever written that's for sure. That's also why I ended the chapter the way I did. There's was no way I could leave Pam hanging anymore. We still have a lot of journey left, but at least there's a glimmer of light at the end of the tunnel now.
Date: July 01, 2018 11:21 am Title: Looking Ahead
I’m so so so excited to read the next chapter when they finally are in the same room after all this time! I know it won’t be so easy, but I all the same I can’t wait. I liked the peek into the early days of Athlead and I think the entire bar scene/breakup scene was written really nicely. I also always enjoy a good Larissa moment! Can’t wait for your next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'd love to tell you what I have planned for the moment Jim and Pam, rather than Jamie and Morgan, meet but what fun would that be? Thanks for the feedback on the breakup scene. I was lucky and married my first serious girlfriend so I have no direct experience with breakups so I'm glad to hear it when people say what I write is realistic. Thanks for the review.
Date: June 28, 2018 06:26 am Title: Looking Ahead
See ya, Jess! I liked the idea that Jim was in a serious relationship for so long... that seems really in line with his character. Always good to see Larissa pop in and set him straight too!
The wings and salt prank made me cringe at the idea of how awful that had to taste but it sure gives us a glimpse of the prank loving Jim we all know and love! And your Michael was fantastic. That whole interview scene had me laughing.
Author's Response: I actually pulled that wings prank back when I was in high school. The results were amazing. Didn't do the salt bit, but it's also a classic prank. Glad you enjoyed the interview scene. It was a little tricky to write, but I like how it ended up. I figured I had to give Jim at least one serious relationship before Pam since I had him single in high school. That way he learns how to be a good boyfriend prior to meeting Pam. Thanks for the review.
Date: June 28, 2018 05:43 am Title: Looking Ahead
I’m really enjoying your writing and the backstory you’re creating while also weaving in elements from the show.
That last chapter with Pam was maybe a bit depressing but it worked very well to get her where she needs to be. But I especially enjoyed what you did with this recent Jim chapter, it falls very much in line with my personal backstory for him. I tend to see him as very immature in relationships, I don’t feel he’s had much experience in relationships before what we’ve seen on the show. But I do feel he has an innate deep respect and value for love and I think that’s basically what you’re showing here and I really appreciate that. (Especially because I just finished reading one of our most popular stories here where they have jims “number” at 11 before pam and that doesn’t even include Karen! I just don’t buy that.)
Author's Response: Thank you. I've said this before, but creating character backstory is fun for me. Answering the question of "why is a character the way they are" when there's no canon reason can be the fuel for some great stories. Truth be told I didn't really like putting Pam through all that, but as you said it get her to where we first see her in the show. Same for Jim. I see both Jim and Pam as romantics, people who want to believe that there is just one perfect person for them. It's just a matter of finding them and getting the timing right.
Date: June 27, 2018 07:31 pm Title: Looking Ahead
I love what you're doing here! A different perspective, but ultimately getting Jim and Pam to where we know and love them.
The breakup with Jess was super realistic, and I'm glad that Jim can grow and learn from it (and hopefully run into our favorite receptionist when he starts his new big boy job).
I can't wait to see more!
Author's Response: Thanks. It's a fun challenge trying to create the backstory to how characters came to be how we found them. Thanks for the review.
Date: June 27, 2018 07:30 pm Title: Looking Ahead
I like Jim here and your vision of why he joins DM. Gotta say, it's not that serious of a relationship if you've been together for four years and you aren't actually discussing post-grad plans until 2 weeks before graduation, or telling your boyfriend that you applied for internships in California...
Author's Response: Thanks. That was what I was going for with the whole Jess thing. I always figured Jim had at least one girlfriend prior to DM, so this was me telling that.
Date: June 21, 2018 10:13 pm Title: Fractured
So good! It’s always nice to see a bit of humanizing when it comes to Roy, and grief is such a powerful thing. I think you’ve translated it’s effects really well in this chapter. And I love getting to see the backstory that we missed on the show! So far this is all in character and well written, so much so that I’m accepting it as headcanon. I can’t wait to see where you go with this; I’m especially looking forward to a glimpse of college aged Jim/Jamie!
Author's Response: Thank you. To be fair, don't set your hope to high for Roy. At this point he's there because he's cannon and as I'm not writing an AU. Backstory is fun to write for me because you get to explore what made a character into who they were when we first see them. Next chapter will include college age Jim to be sure.
Date: June 20, 2018 11:22 am Title: Fractured
Ugh Roy. I’m finding it hard to feel bad for the guy here. I DO feel bad for Pam though.
What I like a lot about this chapter, and this story in general so far is that even though it was just one meeting years ago, Pam still hasn’t forgotten Jim and she still thinks and talks about him. I think most people have that kind of thing in their lives and it’s nice to watch it play out - it’s a good hopeful feeling.
Roy can go kick rocks though.
Author's Response: Yeah, Roy's not the greatest. It's really easy to just paint Roy as this real jerk of a character based on what we've seen in the show. However Pam did start going out with him for a reason and stayed with him for a reason too. So to my mind it's not that he's this intentionally super-jerk, just that he peaked in high school and never really grew from there.
Other than that, picked up on a theme there did you? We may have to play with that some more in future chapters.
Thanks for the review.
Date: June 20, 2018 09:58 am Title: Fractured
You know, I feel bad for Roy for losing his dad, but dang, I really have to hate the guy overall. I do like your Penny and Isabel a lot, though. Nice chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm not a fan of Roy either. One of the reasons I try to keep his screen time to a minimum. Thanks for the insight with Penny and Isabel. As a guy I'm always kinda wondering if I get, "girl talk" right or not. Glad to see it's working though.
Date: June 19, 2018 05:43 pm Title: Nights to Remember
Aww, Fancy New Jamie. I love that.
Plus, a Meemaw shoutout, I don't know what that made me smile but it did.
Okay, we've got Jim and Pam now... now we wait. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thanks. There's just far to many good lines in the show to not use them from time to time. Next chapter is coming, life gets in the way of writing sometimes, but hopefull it'll be up before the weekend.
Date: June 14, 2018 03:28 pm Title: Nights to Remember
Ooohhh yes girl! Girl? Guy? Either way, I love where this is going! So well written and true to character, and I love fics that feature them as younger versions of themselves in one way or another. Can’t wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you. For the record I'm a guy. I'm glad you like it considering I've I've done the majority of my writing at the wee hours of the morning. I'm a paramedic and work nights and so I tend to do my story research and writing between 911 calls.