Date: September 07, 2018 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 3
“Please let me know if this seems like a realistic conversation?? I know that jumping right into a relationship with Jim is not typically how Pam ets written. But I still feel like it works.”
Me too. For starters I feel like you’re writing this pam a little stronger and less confused and broken than most and I really appreciate that. Sure she’s still got a lot to figure out and deal with but she’s finally going after what feels right for her, why wait when it feels so right? I’ve really enjoyed the story so far!
Date: September 06, 2018 09:12 am Title: Chapter 2
I like the concept of this chapter. It's a nice change of pace from from the usual stories where Pam has things figured out about where to live and such and then gets together with Jim. To flip that should make for a compelling tale. I'd like to see where this ends up.
Date: September 06, 2018 09:06 am Title: Chapter 1
One small quibble was that the BBQ at Jim's was after the Dundies, but it's a small quibble. Very sweet and steamy first chapter. Onto the second.
Ooh dang, you’re right! I’ll just take that line out, I don’t think it changes much if she’s never been there before!
Thank you so much for your feedback! I have a 3rd chapter in the works as we speak :)