Date: January 25, 2019 06:33 am Title: DUI
I really like the way you've captured Pam's state of mind in this one. She'd made some big moves, which are bigger considering who she is - or was - at the beginning of the series.
It's easy to imagine her, at her own place for the first time, in front of an empty white sheet of paper, just thinking that she ought to feel better, but she can't yet.
And then Roy's mother calling, bringing her back to this confusing reality in which she is neither here nor there yet, but that still holds so many links to her previous life.
And that last part about not having chicken or fish is perfect. Again, I can imagine her driving to some place completely different, to get a burger or a salad, and actually enjoy it, in a guilty sort of way.
Gotta love Pam, and you make a superb work portraying her! Thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm always unsure if I've hit Pam right, so this is very good to hear.
Date: January 24, 2019 12:02 pm Title: DUI
When the line that Pam had sent Jim an email came around I at once was wondering why he hadn't then seen it last chapter. Good explanation for that there at the end.
I very much get the sense that this is exactly where Pam is right now. Yes, she's making progress, but you're right, things are still off. This is still the beginning of what's probably the most confusing and stressful time in her life. You do a good job at having that come across as one reads.
Author's Response: I wanted to find a middle ground within canon in terms of Pam's outreach. So this was my solution. She's still not fully there...but she's on the path towards Beach Games, I think. Thanks for reading!