1 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2020 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
I like this chapter a lot, because I think you've effectively made the case for the broader concept - that the repetitions both force and allow Pam to observe and reach conclusions about some things that she doesn't have emotional/mental space to come to grips with in her daily life.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, that's why I picked this particular day and character: I think Pam's the one at this point in the narrative who really needs this pause to make her think and rethink her assumptions about the world in a way she can't otherwise.
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 05:54 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
First of all, genius to make Groundhog Day her fifth film choice AND for making it her playbook for how to survive the predicament she's in. (Wouldn't we all do that?)
Hurray for Michael being the (brief) word of wisdom. Granted the bar is low with those clowns, but I like that Michael said what Pam was thinking. Oh, and poor Pam to see and hear that THAT was how her very (seemingly) happy moment was bred.
Comfect, will she see Jim dump Katy? Will she hear Michael say "BFD. Engaged ain't married."? WILL SHE HEAR JIM SAY HE WOULD SAVE THE RECEPTIONIST?!?! Sorry, I'll sit down and stop yelling now.
Author's Response:
Thank you thank you! I saw an opportunity to integrate with canon there and I grabbed it with both hands, thanks for noticing ;)
I think those suggestions may just make it into the story. Possibly. Just possibly ;).
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2019 02:06 am Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
Comfect! I really love this, I never knew I needed this until now
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I love hearing this.
1 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2019 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
So far my favourite chapter. Since you're taking suggestions, maybe make one iteration in which she tries to interact with Jim as much a possible?
Thanks for posting!
Author's Response: I am taking suggestions, and that one will come true. Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2019 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
I liked how you skipped through the first parts of the day here and got right to the Booze Cruise, since that's the salient point of this story. She's making progress for sure here. See what happened with her relationship with Roy first. They've been together so long it makes complete sense that trying to figure out that relationship would be the first place she goes to.
I also like how she's now aware of the time loops. The first one was yes a shock, but now that she knows whats coming it's time to start experiment. As a reader we know she's coming to the first part of the situation. Roy isn't right for her.
You've been subtle about her interactions with Jim, but what is there should hopefully clue her in. If in the next round she realizes that a bit more I think it might be interesting if during the day she asks Jim if he's bringing Larissa on the boat and seeing how the effects of not having Katy there. But again this is your story not mine.
Author's Response: Thank you as always for the detailed feedback. We will definitely get a loop like that, and thank you for the suggestion!