1 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2020 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
I've got to say, your version of Larissa is really kinda defining for me - you've done some great work fleshing her out.
Author's Response: Thank you! She's a character I kind of glommed onto naturally as potentially interesting and worth more attention, so I'm really glad you're finding my fleshing out of her character worthwhile!
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
The beginning of this, when Pam is contemplating that she isn't special enough for this insane metaphysical experience, is so beautifully and heart-breakingly in-character. Well done, there.
But I laughed out loud at "get rid of the cheerleader"! Very nice moment, upgraded when you brought in Jim's sister (what a great characterization you gave her!) as the replacement. Again, you left me laughing out loud with the way Pam offered her a bridesmaid spot.
COmfect, this just keeps getting better and better. I have that great mix of dying to know what happens but thrilled with every creative way you keep stringing me along. I am HERE for it. :)
Author's Response: Aw, DC, thank you so much. I'm afraid this will be longer even than my usual (the chapters are all longer, for one thing, but also I feel like the concept requires a slow build) so I'm really glad to know you're still on board!
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2019 12:15 am Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
The description of Pam’s life as boring and her weighing up what was “fair” with her unlimited time felt spot on to me. I’ve never really met a fandom version of Larissa that I didn’t like and this one is the same. I’m keen to hear what else she could potentially have to say to our sweet (slightly oblivious to the love of her life) Pam.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! We'll hear more from Larissa as this goes on (I'm afraid I've committed to a very long fic here, so it may take a while, but it will happen) and I'm really delighted to hear that you like her. And thanks specifically for the feedback on Pam's reflection about her life--that was important for me writing this so I'm so glad it landed!
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2019 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
Thanks for the follow up. Definitely a different dynamic with Larissa rather than Katy. Again you're being subtle with Pam and Jim, and to a degree with Larissa here. Which makes things good.
Weird analogy time here, but bear with me. Most of the times she's thinking about Jim it's almost as if she's striking flint to steel hoping for a fire to start in order to break the cycle. But the sparks haven't landed yet for the fire to start because she's not quite holding the flint and steel correctly yet. She's close, but not quite there. Since the flint and steel hasn't worked I get the feeling now she's figuratively going to try to rub two sticks together to get something to spark, but I think we all know that will end up being a dud as well. So she'll go back to flint and steel, which is causing sparks. She just needs to examine that a bit more closely and adjust how she strikes and the fire will catch.
Still doing a great job with this and thanks for using my idea.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I enjoy any reason to include Larissa, and I felt like it was a good build up towards Pam's eventual realizations. I like the analogy!