Date: May 02, 2019 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 2
I’m loving the 30’s vibes from this story. Flirty Chicago Jim is a particular favourite of mine.
Author's Response: I'm glad I'm not the only one who is picturing a flirty Jim haha. Flirty, nice suit, the hair, yummy haha. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: May 02, 2019 10:17 am Title: Chapter 2
The plot thickens a bit. Seems Jim's got himself in a bit of a spot. I am wondering if any real life gangsters are going to show up. Back in the 20's Al Capone basically ran Chicago. I know you're setting up Scarn and all, but that could be something to consider.
Also something that might help, a lot of times when I've read books that include song lyrics, the author has set them in the middle of the page as opposed to on the right like for normal conversation or narration. Doing something like that might help you differentiate the lyrics of songs from spoken words. Other than that, nice chapter.
Author's Response: Yes yes yes without giving anything away I'm just going to say yes hahah. Thanks for the notes as always Warrior I dont plan on anymore singing not like every chapter, but I'll be taking that idea into consideration thank you!
Date: April 29, 2019 11:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Just wow.
This was an amazing start, I feel like I’d just been transported into the 1920’s/30’s with all the dialogue and the music.
Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for reading :):):):) I'm glad it came out with that vibe I was hoping for it haha
Date: April 29, 2019 09:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
That's definitely a very unique take on things. Jim, or in this case Jimmy, being a smooth talking jazz man like that was probably the biggest change. Still it wasn't bad. This AU seems like it will be a lot of fun to explore.
Author's Response: warrior I was really hoping you were going to be my first review haha so thank you! Work personas are a thing too not that Im hinting at anything. Thanks for reading!