Date: October 03, 2019 12:35 am Title: Chapter 6: Kelly
That line about Michael actually saying wink, wink, etc was delightful & so, so Michael.
Ah Kelly, if anyone can make an entrance...
Not that any version of Roy is particularly great, but somehow you manage to write the least likable versions of Roy in existence - he’s the absolute worst. He doesn’t even have to be in the chapter for it be obvious what a tool he is... Ugh.
I’m hoping things look up for this version of Pam and Jim sooner than canon...
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm always convinced that I'll mess Michael up so I only put in little bits of him, so I'm delighted to hear this one seemed in character!
And yes...I kind of hate Roy, as is probably obvious, but still, "least likable versions in existence" is a high compliment. I'm gonna keep that one close to my heart.
Date: October 01, 2019 12:14 pm Title: Chapter 6: Kelly
And there's the crashing down moment. After all the build up in his head and the very sweet first impressions he's been having, yeah it was going to come as a blow. Very believable dynamic for how the first day is going thus far. Everyone's delightfully in character as well.
Still I really do like how you've got both Jim and Pam noticing just about everything about each other. There are sparks flying all over the place between them. That part is fun to see. Can't wait to see where the rest of this is heading.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really enjoying writing them in this story (I've just leaned the hell into the romance novel tropes from the books I've been reading) so I'm glad it's working.