Date: October 05, 2019 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 8: Great Scott
I feel like this industrial spies thing is essentially Pam and Jim’s first prank together & I love that Pam set it up, & somehow Dwight’s name is involved. It’s so, so good.
Author's Response: That was my plan, so I'm glad this is how it's coming across to you! Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2019 03:35 pm Title: Chapter 8: Great Scott
Yup, that would be awkward. Still, she didn't pull back so that's something right? Loved the way you added in the 27 seconds. Such pauses are a hallmark of the early JAM relationship so it's good to see such familiar elements pop up.
Michael to save the rescue. Now there's something that doesn't often happen. There are times Michael has his good moments, where he's being sincere and all. That's the usual place for such a moment. Here though in a typical blustery-Michael moment he "saves the day" as you will. Very creative writing in that regard. I liked it.
Also liked how despite everything, Jim's still going on with the plan he and Pam came up with. Hopefully we see what kind of payoff that brings.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the kind words about how I used Michael, since I was concerned about whether that worked. Don't worry, their plan will return in later episodes as well.