Date: October 12, 2019 05:20 pm Title: Chapter 11: Poor Richard's
Ha! That was amazing!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: October 12, 2019 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 11: Poor Richard's
It was kind of unexpected that their “prank” would turn into a legitimate-ish sale. Jim’s really finding his way in sales by the seems of it - although, it’s all about who you know I suppose... It’s nice to see Darryl and Jim hitting it off too. Pam is delightfully awkward.
All the Roy stuff at the beginning... That relationship is so doomed. Even without Jim, it’s just not going to last...
Author's Response: This is the first step in the dominos of change, that Jim starts with an actual real sale, and a slightly different dynamic with Pam as a result. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: October 12, 2019 11:32 am Title: Chapter 11: Poor Richard's
A few interesting things going on here. First is Pam's thought process on her going out with Roy. It seems she's kind of confused as to whether or not she even wants him to remember to bring her with him. The being left behind on the first date is still a major thought. The way you have her here, I think she wants to think she wants to go out with her fiance but in actuality she'd rather be at home doing something else. I mean he can't even let her order for herself and also gets his order wrong. More warning signs that Roy's not right for you Pam.
The other thing is that she lets those kinds of thoughts project onto Jim. There she is thinking he's going to be made at her. Gotta feel for her if that's where her thought process goes first. No wonder other parts of her are intrigued. Listen to your gut Beesly. It's probably right.
Great job as alaways
Author's Response: Danke schoen! I think you have Pam exactly as I want her to be, so I'm glad that's coming through.