Date: November 21, 2019 03:28 am Title: Chapter 19: Parking Lot
Now that's a different take on the confrontation. It really gets out of sorts with Micheal right there in the middle of it. Angry Roy is in true form here. Kinda hoping Darryl and the warehouse guys can maybe talk some sense into Roy but I kinda doubt it.
I did like how through your writing everything seemed to slow down from Jim' POV. Michael's "punches" Roy's tackle, falling into the car. It's actually a very real effect of the flight or fight response. Not sure if you knew that going in but for me at least it comes out in the writing.
Looking forward to seeing how this all shakes out.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was trying for something like that, so I'm glad it came through.
Date: November 20, 2019 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 19: Parking Lot
Of course Michael was the one to draw blood. I’m not surprised & it was a fantastic plot twist all at the same time...
Speaking of twists, the spin on the Churchill quote was fun. I love the Jim was the one to say the never, never give up in this instance.
All of Michael’s response to the situation & checking in on Jim’s injury was great. For a chapter charged with potential violence, this was a whole lot of fun.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was trying for not-obvious but also not-out-of-character. Thanks so much!