Date: November 25, 2019 01:03 pm Title: Chapter 20: Pam in the Parking Lot
Ah, so very Michael... The little details about how he had annoyed the warehouse staff previously were a great touch.
You keep writing these wonderful chapters that end in such a way that all I can think is more please...
Author's Response: Thank you! I will do my best to get this one finished in a vaguely timely fashion.
Date: November 25, 2019 10:44 am Title: Chapter 20: Pam in the Parking Lot
Nice job on the Micheal bluster. You got him portrayed nicely as a chicken-with-his-head-cut-off fluttering about.
As always I like how you've got Pam here. Her immediate concern over Jim and how's she's going to fix him up are heartwarming. So are those little tells, like how his voice is comforting to her. Keep paying attention to those kinds of things.
Looking forward to seeing more of the outcome of all these events.
Author's Response: The dominos will keep falling, never you fear! Thank you so much for the kind words.