Date: October 07, 2020 03:39 pm Title: Chapter 10
I don't know what Ryan's up to, but I don't like it.
Lot of different pieces being moved around here - maybe Pam/Toby? Maybe a confrontation between Pam and the harder, darker Jim? Is there perhaps some money that's supposed to have flown Pam's way that Ryan's trying to get his hands on? You've managed to keep a lot of plot points well juggled here.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that I was able to keep an intrigue!
Date: March 31, 2020 02:35 am Title: Chapter 10
Oh capital letters! This was delightful, and I think the conceit is growing even better as you go along. I liked Toby.
Thank you! I like Toby too.
And I hope the next chapter lives up to your expectation :)
Date: March 29, 2020 05:13 pm Title: Chapter 10
Hmmm.... I wonder what Mr. Howard’s intentions are? 🤔
Author's Response: The hint of those will be in the next chapter!
Date: March 29, 2020 01:20 pm Title: Chapter 10
Again, you do a great job of keeping each one in character without compromising the flow of the story. Sir Michael calling Mr. Flenderson an old shoe and Mr. Howard not asking to be introduced and pressing Pamela to change her plans sounds very like them!
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the continuation of the story as well :)
Date: March 29, 2020 07:53 am Title: Chapter 10
Interesting take on things here. Toby being Michael's brother-in-law was a bit of a hoot. Michael's animosity for the show seemed to be on full display here.
Other than that, I'm seeing shades of Season 3 between Jim and Pam here. Jim pranking Dwight, but not totally going for it. Pam wishing she was still his partner in crime. Both of them letting out only glimpses of their feelings before a mask of polite indifference is pulled down.
I wonder though if Jim overhead Pam responding to "Miss Beesly," rather than "Mrs. Anderson." Makes me wonder if such a thing will come up in next time around. Looking forward to the next chapter for sure.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I'm glad you noticed that 'Miss Beesly' address.
Date: March 29, 2020 03:57 am Title: Chapter 10
You’ve captured the Michael and Toby dynamic so well. Seriously. Michael is just so perfect for this time period. Enough money/status to be seen as relatively important, but not enough sense that he’s constantly committing social slights. It’s perfect. This chapter just further adds to that, especially in his manner towards Toby.
The little flicker of interaction between Pam and Jim was wonderful - in a heart aching sort of way - too. Hopefully he won’t become too cruel in his pranks on Dwight. I love that Karen just doesn’t get it... That’s telling enough.
Bring on the next chapter, I feel like it’s going to be all kinds of awkward for poor Pam!
Thank you so much for your lovely review!
The next chapter is half-written, so it will be soon :)