1 [Report This]Date: March 14, 2020 08:50 am Title: Chapter 7: Food and Flight
Sooo good. I love that Pam is keeping it all for Jim. You write their inner monologues and thought processes so well! I have no trouble believing that this is something both of them could have done (if only, can you imagine a whole season filmed in Australia?) and can’t wait to see when and how they come across each other. Wonderful job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I would have loved at least one episode in Australia--or even Canada-playing-Australia--but alas...
Date: March 14, 2020 06:47 am Title: Chapter 7: Food and Flight
Great way to keep looking into their thoughts. I agree Jim, when not in America don't go for McDonalds. Yes it's easy, it's comforting, but there's other stuff out there. Looks like he's started trying to get over Pam. Of course his thoughts are still full of her but there's some movement too. Oh buddy are you in for another surprise.
Good job with Pam as always. Though I imagine her seatmates are going to be giving her a few side-eyed glances if she keeps the maniacal laughter thing up.
Author's Response: I'm glad you agree! Thanks for the kind words.
1 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2020 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 7: Food and Flight
Your endnote made me chuckle. I haven’t actually spent that much time in Sydney! I think you’re doing a wonderful job! I always love to see how people represent Australia in fics...
My heart aches for Jim in this. He’s trying so hard, but everything is so wrapped up in Pam. I feel like it’s true that a friendship break up can be more difficult to navigate than a relationship break up and that’s really what Jim is dealing with here. It’s tough.
I like that Pam didn’t blurt out her story to her seat-partner. The idea that she needs to save those words for Jim is perfect - some clear communication will only do them wonders.
I am very, very stressed for Pam’s quick layover! I would be an anxious mess...
Author's Response: Thank you, I always strive for chuckles. You've spent more time in Sydney than I have if you've spent any time there, so...still a comparative expert ;). Thank you so much for the comments on the writing, I really appreciate them.
1 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2020 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 7: Food and Flight
First off, I am loving these quick updates!
I've always wondered what would have happened if she had gone after him, now I am finding out!
Their thoughts never really leave each other. I like the anticipation that the back and forth between characters and the long flight are building. Also, having them both as the sole characters works perfectly here.
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm honored to be your concierge on this exploration of possibility. And yes, it does help that I only need to write the two of them because I slimmed down my cast.