1 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2020 02:29 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh, that phone call hurt, but was also pretty darn funny.
You've taken the plot in some directions you don't see a whole lot here! The deadline being Pam's departure and not Jim's casts his desperate throw of the dice in a very different light than we usually see.
Author's Response: Yeah, it was a little painful to write, but I'm really proud of making up that phone call mistake :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 13, 2020 01:27 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh wow. The way that Jim thinks of himself as Roy? I’ve never thought about it that way before. So heartbreaking!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you for your comment! Perhaps, sometimes I'm too harsh to Jim...
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 03:34 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Your writing is hauntingly beautiful. I love how the Jamness is the same but also different, how you capture that banter so well. I'm so excited to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm very insecure about the dialogues (though I like to include them), so your kind words mean a lot to me!
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 04:15 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh, this chapter is both hauntingly beautiful and utterly heartbreaking. When you used the “you have to take a chance on something sometime,” it destroyed me. The angst just rolls off the page. It all feels a little darker in this world at the moment. I hope Jim has the courage to talk to Pam when he’s sober...
Author's Response:
Oh, Jenna, it destroyed me as well when I was writing it, but some things just have to be done...
Buuut... things might change ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 08:53 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
That felt very heavy. Interesting to see them square off like that. I do have to wonder if Jim's bluster has more of an effect than he knows.
Jim's introspection is key here I think. Even before he got drunk, I think it's telling that he is realizing that all the distraction wasn't doing anything to get her away from Roy. It was just covering up things to make the bad relationship easier to forget. I wonder how he might now react after this epiphany.
A heavy but a good chapter to be sure.
Author's Response: Thank you for your great review, Warrior! This chapter was hard to write, but I hope it was worth it. I'll try to keep the story on the same level!
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 08:07 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
You got me with the pump fake on the phone call. I was all 'Noooo you can't say that while drunk Jim!'
I'm really looking forward to seeing how this progresses, keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm terrible with jokes and I'm excited when they work out well :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 07:36 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh no Larissa! I laughed even though my heart was breaking for Jim! Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: I'm glad this story made you laugh and thank you for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 07:28 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
I love that you included their special moment of silently acknowledging the ghost station here with Jim acknowledging what is about to happen, the train slowing to a halt, her being carried away by the crowd, so much lost because:
Jim relied so much on 'maybe,' 'perhaps,' obscure miracles, and lucky chances that he basically did nothing to make them come true. And now it was too late.
I also like that he had the revelation that in some ways, he has failed Pam just like Roy. So many strong feelings.
I would have thrown myself into the pit of despair at the end of this chapter had it not been for the humor in him calling "Pain in the Ass" instead of Pam!
Thanks for saving me and for writing!
Author's Response:
Oh, I'm glad that you had some laugh and I'm sorry that this story almost made you fall into despair :(
I have many feelings about first seasons Jim and I think that he needed a good push to reconsider his feelings and his actions towards Pam. Hope, that would work out well!
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 06:46 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh no!! He called the wrong number!! And he had come lean about his feelings.
Author's Response:
Perhaps, it's for the better that he called the wrong number ;)
Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 05:24 pm Title: Break my chest not knowing the measure
Oh man. That's a misdial all right. At least it's his sister, and not someone he could be romantically linked to...
Author's Response:
Yeah, it would be a disaster if he called Kelly, for example...
Thank you!