1 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2021 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ha, you slipped this one in RIGHT before I started reviewing everything. Clever.
Congrats on the feature!
"Their lives were so entangled and intertwined, that it was difficult to decipher what was love and what was routine and comfort" feels like strong insight into what's going on with Pam. As is, to an unfortunate degree, her ducking calls from her mom as opposed to updating her.
1 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2020 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Welcome back! Casino Night, always a font of angst, but I like what you've done. I'm a big fan of using Pam's POV on Roy immediately after CN for stories, and I like how you're positioning her here.
Author's Response: Thank you! I have always wondered what Pam did and felt right after CN and how she saw maybe saw Roy differently after.
1 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2020 11:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Great insight to the immediate aftermath of The Kiss. You really did a good job getting into her mindset. Coming home to have Roy dismiss her for the game seems par for the course. Of course he doesn't know her life has been thrown into turmoil, but still, you'd think he'd at least turn around see she was upset.
Great way to get into this. Welcome back.