1 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2023 09:07 am Title: Chapter 5
Realized I hadn’t reviewed before now.. I got so excited to keep reading, same red flags have been going up in this old therapists head too… what is up with the locket and the love bombing in the dates..?!
Date: January 05, 2021 12:06 am Title: Chapter 5
This is a brutal start for Jim here. You can't blame him for feeling worried about his place in her life right now - it's hard not to notice that she's gotten a boyfriend and apparently moved on from him. (Although perhaps that tells you something about their relationship?)
It's nice to see Pam having a fully rational reason why she's willing to keep giving things a go with Roy in spite of their not connecting that well - and it's *very* nice to see that Pam is definitely aware that there are some issues here. The locket thing could be perfectly benign, but given his weird comments about it earlier it doesn't really feel that way.
Kelly is the worst kind of Kelly in this story, and yet I'm worried about her.
Interested to see where we're headed with the red flag of Darryl's issues with Roy.
1 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2021 12:06 pm Title: Chapter 5
Just got to where I could sit and read all of this in one sitting. I am not familiar with the inspiration for the story, and I am have to say that I’m glad. I really like the way you have picked up all of these characters in place of them in a new setting and in a way that feels real and familiar. I can totally buy Jim and Danny being siblings, Danny and Karen being married, Jo being Mark’s aunt and employing Pam, Kelly being Pam’s jealous coworker. When you add in all the other little bit and nods to the other characters, it’s a great bit of world building that still feels true to their characterization. I am really loving it.
You do such a great job with writing Roy, too. I don’t know what’s going on with him, but I know that a character like that that has some strange hidden motive and is sneaky and manipulative the way that this Roy seems to be is really difficult to write. You do a great job of making me wonder if I’m reading too much into things, much the same that Pam is herself. Great job there!
I love Singer! I love Jim and Pam’s relationship. I LOVE all the dialogue. You have everyone’s voices spot on. I’m kind of glad I was behind the curve on reading this one because it meant I had quite a few chapters to binge at once. Now if you could just go ahead and publish the rest ASAP as possible, that’d be excellent.
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2021 08:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hmm, why is Pam so thrilled he won't kiss her? Is it because she really loves Jim? I hope that's the case because the dog and I are both on the same page here that something is off with Roy.
Loved the update!
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2021 07:17 pm Title: Chapter 5
This version of Roy gives off such a weird vibe. I have no clue what his deal is yet, but I know I don’t like it... Jim’s conversation with Daryl was all sorts of ominous too.
Dwight is a delight! Of course it needs to be perfectly centered.
For a second there you had me going & I thought Jim had really taken Kelly on a date...
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2021 12:00 pm Title: Chapter 5
I've said it before and I'll say it again. Trust the dog Pam. Singer has been onto Roy since the off. If you can't trust your own mind, trust his. Same when Singer goes off on his own, who does he go to? Jim!
Nice long chapter with a lot to chew on. Seems like Roy is trying to pull out all the stops. Using money and gifts to get ingratiate Pam to him. Though there's a lot to be concerned about. The locket is only the tip of the iceberg that I see. If he gets all bent out of shape about her not wearing it, what happens when they have bigger disagreements? Is he going to pull out "look how much I've done and spent for and on you? That's the gratidude I get?" and guilt Pam into a situation she doesn't want to be in. At least that's how I'm reading this.
Though Pam's already seeing signs herself the relationship with Roy isn't a good one. No sparks during the dates, getting upset about not wearing the locket, figuring out it was manipulation she was feeling, and of course relief that he leave there at the end. Also that she kept Singer with her till he left.
For a while I've been wondering as to the name of this piece. "Guardian." More and more it seems like Pam is going to need one. But who is that person? Or dog? Side note I LOVE Singer. Give him all the doggie treats.
I'm also kind of wishing Jim would grow a pair. His intuition on Roy also seems sound and he has more evidence with the way Darryl reacted. If you're really Pam's best friend, maybe it's time to step up even if it's hard.
Should be interesting to see where we go from here.
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2021 09:14 am Title: Chapter 5
I loved reading this chapter! Even though I know the story, I found myself wondering what was going to happen next. You've done such an amazing job putting the characters in the story in a way that keeps things interesting. I love Kelly in the story, especially. "Lame Is" LOL! And I really like how you're taking us through what Pam is thinking. Roy doesn't rock her boat. That is an excellent way of putting it. Oh, Pam, I just need you to get with Jim already! I think he just might rock your boat... ;)
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2021 07:56 am Title: Chapter 5
I’m so excited this one was updated!! I love this story. I’m super curious to find out what the deal with Roy is...all I know is that I don’t like him at all. Haha and the scene with Pam and Jim was so cute, with their teasing and banter and I love that Jim does puzzles!
I will also never complain about long chapters so never apologize for them. :)
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