1 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2020 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 1: Battle of the Jims
I like the emotions of Jim regarding his sister, Larissa, and Pam's compassion for Jim's pain. I love anything JAM, so bring on the romance.
1 [Report This]Date: September 16, 2020 02:27 pm Title: Chapter 1: Battle of the Jims
Getting some very Cardiac Care vibes here! I loved that story so this is a great start. You've done a great job setting the mood here, with Pam's morose turning quickly into selfess concern and Jim's subsequent vulnerability. Karen the conversation killer is an interesting new lense to me, I really like how you explained the lack of communication up until this point.
Looking forward to more! I mean - I already read everything I'm just coming back to review, but you know what I mean!
Date: September 15, 2020 10:23 am Title: Chapter 1: Battle of the Jims
Usually when one thinks of a hospital fic, it's either Jim or Pam who is the one in the hospital. So to have it be Larissa as the one who's hurt is a good way to change things up.
Seems like a plausible way to get them on the road together. Of course Jim would be the nice guy to let someone borrow his car. Likewise Pam is right there regardless of everything to offer hers. I like this choice since it shows that even in their off times, they're gret for each other since their thoughts run the same way.
Also as an aside, I used to live in Rochester. Don't know if you are aware of any of the local hospitals there but a good one is Strong Memorial if you're looking to add a touch of realism to the fic.
Author's Response: Oh, awesome! I'm definitely throwing that hospital in somewhere. :) Thank you for the review!
1 [Report This]Date: September 15, 2020 03:42 am Title: Chapter 1: Battle of the Jims
I love a good hurt/comfort story! Excited to see where you take this! Your opening line was great - I love a new way of saying something fairly common place in fic.
Author's Response: Thank you! I felt pretty proud of that line, because like you said there are only so many ways to say she looked at the back of his head all the time. So I'm glad you liked it!
Date: September 15, 2020 01:21 am Title: Chapter 1: Battle of the Jims
This is an interesting start.
Keep going with it.