Date: June 16, 2021 08:21 pm Title: The One That's Jim
Kind of fun to get this glimpse into Jim's mind. The quick recap of his relationship with Pam with the day they first met, along with the day Helene showed up for work and he overheard her asking about him. It looks like Helene's taken a shine to him too and Pam seems very happy to introduce her mother to a favorite place to eat. Nice job.
You remember when he confessed his love for "Italian food" and it was really her he was talking about?
Thank you for reading and reviewing. :)
Date: March 28, 2021 12:58 pm Title: The Crustacean and The Key Lime
I just found this! I like your truncated style of writing. It's light and breezy yet conveys all the salient information and emotion.
This chapter evokes the road trips, hell, just leaving the house, that we all want at this point without dragging us through our recent history. Good onya!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad the writing style works for you, story too. :)
Date: March 27, 2021 04:59 pm Title: The Crustacean and The Key Lime
Awww, Pam look at you go whisking Jim away for a surprise out-of-town date like that. Delightful. Not only does she remember his favorite food, but they finally get the night away that they'd always hoped for. Just each other, good food, and well each other some more. Lots of fun with this one.
Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed it, thanks!
Date: January 10, 2021 09:55 pm Title: Jim Halpert Confesses to Murder
HA. I'M SO HAPPY YOU FINALLY POSTED THIS.
Pam's reaction here is just pitch perfect. They really are meant for each other.
Author's Response: Oh gosh, I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so much!
Date: January 10, 2021 04:40 pm Title: Jim Halpert Confesses to Murder
I noticed that too or heard it in OL or both. But I love that you wrote about it. It was a lot of fun.
I never did, I mean, how did I miss it??
Oh, that's right. I was staring at Jim staring at Pam. ;)
And thank you!
Date: January 10, 2021 04:26 pm Title: Jim Halpert Confesses to Murder
Ok, I'm going to have to go back and look for that. That's an amazing detail and you built a really fun chapter out of it.
Jim's confession was a lot of fun. How he was nervous if she'd really be mad at him or not. Then when she comes in with running off to Canada, yeah how could he do anything but think that.
Wonderfully cheesy and bantery and the kind of Jim and Pam in love wonderfulness that makes their relationship great.
Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad it all worked! Thank you so much for so kindly reviewing! I really love their bantering too. :)
Date: December 01, 2020 05:32 am Title: More Honest
Re: Jim Halpert confesses to murder, I think it slots in well stylistically, so if it fits with your overall plan, I say go for it. But it could certainly stand alone.
Author's Response: Okay, thanks for the advice. :)
Date: November 30, 2020 03:45 pm Title: More Honest
I love the trip through memory lane in this chapter - they have a lot of history that all of a sudden is a lot more pleasant to think about together, and that history is so important to why they're moving so quickly, well worth going through.
Nice to see another chapter of this one! (You ought to post Jim Halpert Confesses to Murder when you get the chance, too!)
Author's Response: Actually, I was thinking about adding it as a chapter of this story. What do you think?
Date: November 30, 2020 02:49 pm Title: More Honest
Lovely way for them to heal some old sores as well as have a fun walk down memory lane. I really love it when they realize all the previous times they've spent together mean a lot more than just simple friendship. It was the build-up of everything that makes them, them. And with lots of fun banter to boot. Nice job with this update. I really liked it.
Yeah what did Pam say later on in the show, then it took 4 years?
Anyway, thank you! :D
Date: November 08, 2020 05:03 pm Title: Everybody's Business
I really love a good ensemble scene! I thought Michael and Kevin especially worked well, and Stanley not at all caring is pitch perfect. A very funny chapter!
Author's Response: Excellent, thank you!!
Date: November 08, 2020 11:20 am Title: Everybody's Business
Nice way of getting everyone's persepctive. At first I was confused who was talking. The line "Hey, where's Karen? I was going to ask her about Point Sales account," could have been from anyone. Until it became clear that Micheal was talking I had no idea who said that. The rest of the characters came across well though.
Other than that it was fun to have Pam's and a bit of Jim's perspective on things. Nice update.
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Sorry for the slight confusion.
Date: November 08, 2020 06:36 am Title: Everybody's Business
Lots of good stuff here. You really nailed the essence of the co-workers. Amazing how three m's epitomize Stanley but they really do.
Author's Response: Stanley is Stanley, right? Ha!
Date: October 26, 2020 03:49 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
I am so happy that you're writing here! Your writing is fantastic, I love being able to hear them talking and imagine all of it.
Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! You're very gracious. :D
Date: October 26, 2020 01:33 pm Title: The Bandaid
I had more or less the same reaction as you did to this scene - I feel bad for Jim, but good heavens did he have that particular beating coming. Especially given that he just kinda... snuck off.
I like this newly confident Pam - and one who recognizes that sometimes, the answer is just to be together. And I'm glad you worked the ensemble into this!
Yes, it was a pretty ugly moment for him. But the whole thing with Jim/Karen/Pam was just cringeworthy to begin with.
And very realistic, I think.
Anyway, thanks again!
Date: October 26, 2020 10:51 am Title: The Bandaid
Yeah, Jim did some things he shouldn't be proud of during S3. Stringing Karen along chief among them who's only issue really is that she's not Pam. But like this chapter title implies, just rip off the band-aid and get it over with. A brief flare of pain then it's over and done.
Good on Pam to check in on him but not be to obvious about it. Very sweet.
Also they cuddle on the couch watching "The Princess Bride?" Yup, that's just adorable and lovely. Great movie, great company, great couple. Just a wonderful scene to envision.
I'm so glad you liked it!
I agree with you, what happened with Karen was pretty unseemly. I really felt sorry for her. :(
And I just couldn't see Jim physically cheating on Karen with Pam, that would have been awful to me.
Just my opinion.
And thanks for reading and speaking out! :D
Date: October 17, 2020 07:00 am Title: Free For Dinner
You’re such a talented writer. You managed to bring the spirit of Jim and Pam without writing a lengthy story. Simply genius writing.
My favorite moment was when Pam ruffled Jim’s hair to get her good ol’ Jimothy back. They were definitely made for one another.
These chapters made me smile so hard. I would love to read more stories from you in the future.
Thank you so much! You're very gracious!
Jimothy, oh my goodness, yes, ha!
"Are you okay with being called Jim?" "I am."
Date: October 17, 2020 05:29 am Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
I love the efficiency of your writing style - you pack so much punch without having to say a lot. All the little call backs are so wonderful.
Being on her own for a bit, crucial to her growth- I appreciate the way the TV story unfolded allowing her to have a time on her own instead of going right from Roy to Jim - really glad you touched on that.
Again - I think we see a lot of things the same - you can get them across effortlessly in few words - but I know exactly where you are coming from! (Me, I need to use a few more words)
Great bit how they decide not to come out.
Nice to get the call out - thanks and aren't Jelly Beans the BEST!
I agree with you. She needed to be on her own for a bit. And frankly, she needed the experience of being friendzoned too. Even if it was painful for all of us involved.
The jelly beans really are adorable, yes!
And thank you again for taking the time to read. I very much appreciate it and your kind words about my writing style. 🙂
Date: October 16, 2020 11:57 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
Again, you've made some daring structural choices here that I'm enjoying - it really drives home how much history they have and how present it is in this new moment in their relationship. It's very cinematic, in a way - I can picture it in montage form.
The banter felt very in character for them - as did this very unfancy date. And the Niagara Falls reference made me smile.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate that. 🙂
Date: October 16, 2020 11:42 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
Nice addition here. All her thoughts and memories getting tangled and muddled up with each other. Likewise when Jim finally comes over to her place the same thing happens. However just as quickly as the old memories start to invade, they're back to their classic banter and new memories are being formed. Love it. Also love the little teaser there about Niagara Falls. Just a fun little shout out.
Short but still sweet for this one. I liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate that. I'm glad the muddled up thoughts weren't too muddled up, ha.