Date: October 26, 2020 03:49 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
I am so happy that you're writing here! Your writing is fantastic, I love being able to hear them talking and imagine all of it.
Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! You're very gracious. :D
Date: October 17, 2020 05:29 am Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
I love the efficiency of your writing style - you pack so much punch without having to say a lot. All the little call backs are so wonderful.
Being on her own for a bit, crucial to her growth- I appreciate the way the TV story unfolded allowing her to have a time on her own instead of going right from Roy to Jim - really glad you touched on that.
Again - I think we see a lot of things the same - you can get them across effortlessly in few words - but I know exactly where you are coming from! (Me, I need to use a few more words)
Great bit how they decide not to come out.
Nice to get the call out - thanks and aren't Jelly Beans the BEST!
I agree with you. She needed to be on her own for a bit. And frankly, she needed the experience of being friendzoned too. Even if it was painful for all of us involved.
The jelly beans really are adorable, yes!
And thank you again for taking the time to read. I very much appreciate it and your kind words about my writing style. 🙂
Date: October 16, 2020 11:57 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
Again, you've made some daring structural choices here that I'm enjoying - it really drives home how much history they have and how present it is in this new moment in their relationship. It's very cinematic, in a way - I can picture it in montage form.
The banter felt very in character for them - as did this very unfancy date. And the Niagara Falls reference made me smile.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate that. 🙂
Date: October 16, 2020 11:42 pm Title: Sandwiches and Clown Cars
Nice addition here. All her thoughts and memories getting tangled and muddled up with each other. Likewise when Jim finally comes over to her place the same thing happens. However just as quickly as the old memories start to invade, they're back to their classic banter and new memories are being formed. Love it. Also love the little teaser there about Niagara Falls. Just a fun little shout out.
Short but still sweet for this one. I liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate that. I'm glad the muddled up thoughts weren't too muddled up, ha.