1 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2021 11:14 am Title: Spiraling
Wow. You've done it. Gone and left me speechless and that is not something easily achieved with me but this writing was just so .... See I can't even find a word to describe how it made me feel
The way you added such depth to the things we knew and saw-the conversation with her mom and the dojo and dundies and teapot add-ones, all of it heightened what made this chapter so gorgeous.
I'm almost afraid to read more as my heart is already hurting and Jims pain might be too much when told with your words.
But I'll try to be strong and read on.
1 [Report This]Date: October 24, 2020 10:54 pm Title: Spiraling
“She had simply shoved them in the drawer.
Turns out this was her thing.” Oh. OH. Wow. I love this, Pam rummaging through her desk drawers & only finding more of their history there. The fact she kept those particular sun chips? It’s making me feel all the feels.
The imagery of Pam’s thoughts yelling at her is achingly haunting and so very good.
“But she knew she had only missed as much as he had misinterpreted.
Nothing, that was.”
This line is truly so damn good. I love that it’s in the summary, & to find it here, where is belongs is just perfection.
“those lines that sometimes seemed to haze and others they appeared so stingingly sharp” If this isn’t truly one of the best descriptions of early seasons Jim and Pam I don’t know what is.
All the onlys... my heart.
I love everything about this so very much. Your writing is beautiful.
1 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2020 08:25 pm Title: Spiraling
Uhhhhhhh.................
*Shakes his head for a second to regain his faculties.*
Wow! That was the best and probably most in depth look into Pam's mind for this moment I think I've ever read. Her fear, panic, anxiety, hurt, angst, everything swirling around as she tries to makes sense of what Jim just told her.
How she still tries to run away and avoid things. After so many years of denial it's familiar territory. However as the chapter goes on and she really starts to look, the revelations are everywhere.
I really loved the extended phone call with her Mom. That added so much more depth to everything. At the same time the conversation is helping her to get things back in some kind of order after they've been blown around like a cornfield after a tornado.
Only for a second tornado to come around with The Kiss.
Just superb description and narration of that moment in time. You can just feel every emotion running through her. Amazing. Onto the next chapter.
Author's Response: Honestly I must have read this review about 20 times. Everyone, listen up! The two first lines of this ^ are the purpose of this life. I've solved the most pivotal question for you all. You're welcome :) Okay no but, seriously, you'll be the death of me warrior4. Thank you so much for this review, I think I didn't breathe at all the first time I read it, it's exactly the reason why I'm doing this. Best reward ever. Thank you so much!!!
1 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2020 12:09 pm Title: Spiraling
Yes, it’s been done before, but who gets tired of reading it? Honestly, a Casino Night or The Job fic is basically an MTT rite of passage so far as I can figure, and this is a REALLY good one.
I like what you’ve done with the Pam chapter. My favorite kind of AU is one that also helps illustrate why canon went the way it did, and you’ve done well at illustrating the forces pushing back against Pam having this sort of realization. It’s a very sold depiction of the mental turmoil Pam went through on Casino Night and her wrestling with her desire to ignore it.
The metaphor of her refusing to eat the apology chips from The Fight or acknowledge what it meant that they didn’t is great – and feels like the sort of metaphor she would actually acknowledge at this point.
The sequences of her memories of the physical sensations of being with Jim is just really well-written (I’m a sucker for this kind of use of repetition), and you do well at filling out the details of her history and offering a context for WHY she’s made the decisions she’s made.
Author's Response: I've already thanked you for both reviews in the second one but it would be the most heinous crime if I didn't respond to this one as well. You taking the time and effort to read and write all this down really means the world - I mean you know that as a fellow writer of course but... Just, thank you. Really. Ahhh, this was so lovely!
1 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2020 11:26 am Title: Spiraling
I really, really enjoyed this and it is very well written! You have very descriptive imagery that just pulled me in and the phone conversation felt very authentic. Well done!
Author's Response: Omg, you're too kind! I'm so glad to hear this. Thank you so much!!