1 [Report This]Date: November 28, 2020 12:50 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow. Just... wow. Okay. I see how it is.
No, but seriously - in addition to offering a cautionary tale about idealizing the days before cell phones, you made some really interesting if deeply personally hurtful choices here. Jim having a history with Karen he's trying to get away from is a fun twist on canon, as is a Jim who still doesn't know what he wants to be but knows exactly what he's running away from. Looking forward to seeing how that plays out. And I suppose it's not much of a story if things just... go well.
I really liked Pam's inner monologue here and the way you walked us through her artistic process. Fun seeing how her mind works.
Really though. Mean.
Author's Response: I know, I know, I’m feeling the shame, but a story’s not a story without a little conflict, don’t you worry, everything will be just fine :) and yes, pre-cellphone life was probably pretty tragic in college, I can’t imagine the frustration of not being able to reach out when you need to! Thank you so much for continuing to read and review!
Date: November 28, 2020 11:13 am Title: Chapter 2
Oof. There's always something isin't there. So Karen and Jim have history. That's an interesting turn. Especially with Pam and Karen being roommates. I really get the feeling that Jim doesn't really want to be in that position with Karen. Like she sees him as a target, sees him as James, when he really wants to be Jim.
I kind of hope Jim and Pam can bounce back from this, but who knows. It does seem like a set back to be sure.
Great job in bringing in a lot of emotion to be sure.
Author's Response: Thanks Eric for the review! I usually shy away from too much conflict, but they’re young and vulnerable, and especially when you’re trying to create a new sense of self at college, and let your past go. They’re both hiding from parts of their pasts which will come to light, but don’t you worry about Jim and Pam, they’ll be just fine :)
1 [Report This]Date: November 28, 2020 10:08 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh no!!!!! Not Jim and Karen. Dont break my heart like that. Can’t wait to read more
Author's Response: Ahahaha a little conflict to make things interesting, just for now, I promise. :)